Undoubtedly, by the advent of technology the speed of every thing have increased. Some people believe that every thing must be correct for doing works and do not require to make a risk while others disagree. From my estimation I content that in today’s world people will be better to take a risk in various situation due to happening every thing in high speed, wasting time by considering more than usual and being successful needs to take a risk.
Firstly, nowadays the speed of occurring of every thing is high. Sometimes an idea for fulfilling must do immediately. Take a person to establish a special fast food restaurant as an example. If he want to consider the various aspects of subject and waits for illustrating other vague aspects, he may not be successful in his idea. Because during considering other people may operate more fast that him and copy his idea therefore he do not able to start fast food idea. In addition this subject can be happen in internet trading base business. In this media, an idea must be established as soon as possible like Amazon. Thus, because of being every thing high speed todays, people should do their work more faster and take a risk sometimes.
Secondly, by wasting the time some ambiguous aspects of every thing may not be clear. According to the psychologists, some people cover their fear behind their consideration. When they want to make a decision they consider more than usual to clearance every thing. The first step is the hard one. In my opinion, after some thinking about a project a decision must be made immediately. By consuming much time clearance may not occur. In result, taking a risk can be mention as a first step for doing every thing.
Finally, being successful needs to take a risk in many situations. In the new world, some projects or subjects requires to fall in risky status. By considering the successful people lifestyle it can be referred that some of them have been exposed to the risky situation. Besides, some of position can be achievable by taking a risk. Therefore, succeed can behind take risking.
In sum, based on aforementioned reasons I believe that people should take a risk in many decision and try to do every thing immediately instead of do slow and correctly because of speed of happening things, no wasting time and exploring successes behind the risk.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'making'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: making
...rect for doing works and do not require to make a risk while others disagree. From my e...
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Line 3, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ds to take a risk. Firstly, nowadays the speed of occurring of every thing is...
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Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...st food restaurant as an example. If he want to consider the various aspects of subj...
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Line 3, column 422, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ate more fast that him and copy his idea therefore he do not able to start fast f...
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Line 3, column 437, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...hat him and copy his idea therefore he do not able to start fast food idea. In ad...
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Line 3, column 477, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...do not able to start fast food idea. In addition this subject can be happen in internet ...
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Line 3, column 611, Rule ID: AS_ADJ_AS[1]
Message: Comparison is written "as possible 'as'".
Suggestion: as
...must be established as soon as possible like Amazon. Thus, because of being every th...
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Line 3, column 706, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'faster' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: faster
...eed todays, people should do their work more faster and take a risk sometimes. Secondly, ...
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Line 4, column 176, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... their fear behind their consideration. When they want to make a decision they consi...
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Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'falling'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: falling
...rld, some projects or subjects requires to fall in risky status. By considering the suc...
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Line 6, column 85, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun decision seems to be countable; consider using: 'many decisions'.
Suggestion: many decisions
...lieve that people should take a risk in many decision and try to do every thing immediately i...
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Line 6, column 265, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd exploring successes behind the risk.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1955.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82716049383 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68024207994 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466666666667 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.1021148011 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.4583333333 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.875 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.79166666667 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118970622973 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0364756787568 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470139282762 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0808550695257 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439057029439 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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