Children nurturing has attracted much social concern. Many educational specialists believe that encouraging children to take part-time jobs is one of the best ways parents should do to help them prepare for the future. Personally, I bear in mind a strong agreement with this belief.
On the one hand, what has been put under consideration is personal development. The fact is that taking a part-time job creates chances for children to encounter varied circumstances in working. In this case, it is possible for them to reflect on themselves through their own failures and successes. As a result, children are supposed to obtain valuable experience and be aware of their strengths and weakness to fill the gaps in their capabilities. Consequently, it greatly promotes the development of children’s competence. More importantly, it cannot be denied that having a part-time job possesses a large opportunity for children to confront many difficulties which they could not face at school. It leads to the fact that there is a likelihood for them to have a better understanding of specific subjects and figure out the gaps between theories and practices. On that ground, needless to say, children tend to gradually improve their thinking and upgrade their personal skills such as time management or decision making. As a consequence, they are certain to be more mature and experienced. By and large, promoting children to take a part-time job is a great idea for parents.
On the other hand, some people might say that taking a part-time job forces children to spend much time working, leading to an extreme decline in their studying. Accordingly, their future will be seriously affected. However, it is just applicable to a minority. It is widely known that every company or business group always has policies to prevent their workers from stress by giving a suitable amount of tasks. It follows that children can keep involving in part-time jobs and schedule to put everything under control. Furthermore, taking a part-time job stands a golden chance for children to interact with many different people. Therefore, it is expected to stimulate them to grow into a more social person and have a larger range of relationships. Correspondingly, it is apparent that children are capable of receiving a lot of helpful support from others to tackle all the matters they have in their lives, especially in studying. This, in turn, forms a significant contribution to furthering children’s academic records. Subsequently, it is easier for children to study more effectively and have better preparation for their future. Beyond any doubt, the idea that having a part-time job sets a serious effect on children’s future is often possible to end in collapse.
In a word, all factors mentioned above are evidence supporting my agreement. It is highly recommended that everyone should take my writing into careful consideration to make an appropriate decision in bringing up the children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 611, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...en chance for children to interact with many different people. Therefore, it is expected to st...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, such as, as a result, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2519.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24791666667 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10980681675 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541666666667 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 780.3 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2665064697 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8846153846 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4615384615 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84615384615 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00704925838664 0.236089414692 3% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0022576417872 0.076458572812 3% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.011288208936 0.0737576698707 15% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0113678118307 0.150856017488 8% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196896276616 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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