TPO-24 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples

In the modern era, part time job available for the students it easier to student that get the financial supports for their education. I certainly agree that parents should motivate to their child to participate in the part- time job is best tactics to prepare teenager children for adult life because of immature children learn their responsibilities, understand the value of money and get the knowledge and experience about the outside the studies.
To begin with, foster to adolescent person to take job is help to learn their responsibilities because of all teenagers financially depend on the parents. A child to adult periods is too short in which children easier understand and follow the parent’s directions. He has help that earn money uses in their studies such as buying book, tuition fees and transportation. Therefore, it helps to both parents and children learn how to uses money in good ways.
Furthermore, initial stage of the youngster must understand the value of money, If a person take a part-time job, he learn that no pain no gain means hard work required for earn money. Before the job most of children extravagant but when they work and understand to how earn money they limited use their parents money.
Moreover, part-job job is one kind of expand the knowledge and experience of the teenagers. For instance, I was in first year my college I was worked in the computer center, It is experience help me in my current nursing job to easier to I operate my computer and enter the medical history and data of the patients. In addition, Job is help to increase the communication skill and chance to make friends. If adults have experience about the job, he can easier find job and adjust to their co-worker.
In conclusion, parents should promote to their teenager children to participate in the part-time job for understand the real life. Working students gain the knowledge and experience of work place to acetate to adjust in the future jobs learn responsibilities and financial help to family.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
In the modern era, part time job available for the students it easie...
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Line 1, column 234, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
...ld to participate in the part- time job is best tactics to prepare teenager children fo...
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Line 3, column 118, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'learns'.
Suggestion: learns
...y, If a person take a part-time job, he learn that no pain no gain means hard work re...
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Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the children') or simply say ''most children''.
Suggestion: most of the children; most children
...required for earn money. Before the job most of children extravagant but when they work and unde...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95014662757 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87718407164 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478005865103 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 519.3 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.0446892173 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.571428571 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3571428571 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 5.45110844103 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285887876536 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113433810181 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674682256236 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176304703456 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568321397442 0.0645574589148 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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