TPO-24 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples
Nowadays one of current affairs for younger people is having job. Therefore, some parents encourage their children to take a part-time job to prepare for the adult life and penchant that working as a part-time job for the future life, while others believe that this issue has detrimental impact on children's education. I do find the idea of the former group more in accordance with that of mine; to support my stance, in the course of this essay, I will aptly substantiate my viewpoint.
First and foremost, having a part-time job would prepare children for a brilliant career. The reason for this is that if children have a vocation, they would gain knowledge how to deal with it and examine several methods to be successful in their career and if there is a problem with it they would learn how to solve it. For example, a friend of mine in our office is very prospering in his career life and make a lot of money because he is very experienced. He has this job since he was thirteen years old and although he is younger than everybody else in our office, he always teaches us successful techniques and worthwhile experiences in this job.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that working provides a situation which makes teenagers independent and teaches them how to overcome obstacles in their life. The results of a study conducted in my country indicate that many of prosperous people initiate occupation in their early ages which broaden their horizon and expand their knowledge for encountering hardships. For instance, when I was in university, professor of our chemistry class was very well-know and thoroughbred. He most of the time told us when I was young, my father and mother died and I had to work to earn money to buy food and clothes for myself.
Additionally, taking a part-time job for children could make them be responsible. This is primarily because when children have a job, they would learn think as adults and make decisions. In this case children go to school then go to work so they see themselves in front of so many things to do. Thus, they need to decide how much time have for studying, working going out, spending time with their friends and so on.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that taking part-time job could have remarkable impact on teenager’s life. Not only this improves their profession skill but also it establish a condition for children to be flourishing in their social life. I would strongly subscribe the fact that involving with extra activities in the early ages, would have promising development in the rest of their life, since benefits of this practice clearly outweigh its disadvantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 151, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to think'
Suggestion: to think
...n children have a job, they would learn think as adults and make decisions. In this c...
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Line 5, column 213, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'establishes'?
Suggestion: establishes
...oves their profession skill but also it establish a condition for children to be flourish...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2247.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86363636364 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76710163272 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512987012987 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.0371695891 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.833333333 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287973228044 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101900434261 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737373324201 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177184942237 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054218439052 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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