TPO-24 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples

One of the most controversial issues has always been how to raise a child to be a successful and satisfied person in the future. While some people think that children should just play and enjoy their life without any pressure,e I hold the opposite perspective. I believe that children should learn essential skills for their life and a part-time job is a good option for serving this demand. Ensuing paragraphs will illustrate my point of view.
First, part-time job learns children to be responsible as they can not make mistake and did not pay for it. Furthermore, they have a task and they will be evaluated by their performance that it teaches them responsibility. On the other word, they also earn money and they should manage it that also cause to learn how to be responsible.
Second, it helps children boost their self-confidence and self-esteem. They learn new skills and convey to more people and both of them render their self-confidence get raised. For instance, when I was 16 I used to teach English to small kids in a small institute during summer and it was really valuable experience and help me how to teach what I have learned also I really improve my English because I wanted to be best at teaching, I spend a lot of time on English. In the end, it immensely enhanced my self-confidence. Besides, it helps me to eliminate some of my flaws like stress during the presentation.
Last but not the least, this kind of experience will be useful for children's' future job. On the other hand, they can identify which field of work they like. Therefore, they will choose their college major in a more accurate way due to having experience.
To conclude, having a part-time job has prominent advantages. Not only it helps children to be more responsible and confidence but also it will provide a better future for their work career. If I have a child, I will let him or her gain these important result from a part-time job as I did.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , e
...nd enjoy their life without any pressure,e I hold the opposite perspective. I beli...
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Line 2, column 305, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'learning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: learning
...d they should manage it that also cause to learn how to be responsible. Second, it help...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, really, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1603.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67346938776 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82121156113 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539358600583 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5870354083 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0555555556 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0555555556 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18179591118 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631186113696 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491913969289 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110749894656 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276937863945 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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