TPO 24 Integrated Writing Task

Both the author of the reading and the professor discuss research on living tissues found in T-Rex's bone. The author claims that scientists have found living tissues, which is not usually possible and gives three reasons of support. The professor, however, opposes what claimed in the passage.

First off, the reading states that small channels may include blood vessels, which may also be evidence of the actual blood vessels. The lecturer, on the other hand, believes that they might be a more different organism. Usually, bacterias living inside the bones colonize hollows that resemble channels. So, this finding must be the trace of the bacteria colonize.

According to the article,iron-a material found in a sphere in the bones may be a piece of evidence since it has a dark red center and resemble actual red blood cells in size. The speaker, by contrast, claims that scientists found an identical fossil that might belong to a primitive animal that did not have red blood cells. Thus, that sphere may have a different origin and include reddish minerals.

Lastly, the passage contends that collagen found in a dinosaur's bone may be components of living tissue. The professor, by contrast, rebuts this by explaining that collagen, which is supposed to belong millions of years bones, cannot be older than 100 years ago. Likely explanation must be like that the collagen found in the research does not come from T-Rex but from other animals or a tissue of a researcher handling the bones.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 25, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , iron-a
...ia colonize. According to the article,iron-a material found in a sphere in the bones...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, may, so, thus, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 43.0788530466 35% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1255.0 1977.66487455 63% => OK
No of words: 249.0 407.700716846 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04016064257 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.482051179 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55421686747 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 372.6 618.680645161 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4050354194 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5384615385 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1538461538 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46153846154 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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