TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

Without a shadow of the doubt, choosing a job is a very crucial decision of life, which affects the future of the individuals. It is a very controversial question that whether say yes to any job or wait for the dream job and many theories are overwhelming this topic. In my opinion, we should accept the job without any delay which secures the future financially. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, unemployment has increased dramatically from last few decades, because of that even well-educated people cannot get a job easily. Everyone tries their luck to get one of the best occupations, but every year only a few positions are opened. Even for the one vacancy companies get thousands resumes, so it is very competitive to get into any organization. My cousin’s experience is a compelling example of this. After passing his graduation in computer science, he applied for various jobs but could not get any call from anywhere. In the final, he got an offer from a computer repair shop, at first, he was feeling hesitate to accept it but he had no choice. So, he started working over there. On the other hand, his friends refused such small job offers from small organizations. Within two years, his owner opened a new branch at the higher level and he becomes the manager in that branch. In this way, he got his promotion as well good wage from the company.
Secondly, most of the employment industries hire the experienced person. After graduation, most of the students have not any experience usually, if they accept the work at small-firms, this experience makes them the proficient candidate to apply for their favourite job. My cousin’s experience who started working as the manager, after some time he got many jobs offers from various big firms. However, his friends were struggling to get a basic job in any company, because every year thousand students passed out from the schools and they all need employment. In such situations, accepting the offer is a wise idea later on people regret their decision and it makes their situation mockery in the society.
In conclusion, I strongly feel we should always think in the long term and better future, so accepting opportunity means you will get some professional experience and learn new things which opens the door for your next job.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
... job in any company, because every year thousand students passed out from the schools an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1968.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87128712871 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77679970582 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556930693069 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8883058268 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156410762848 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483722946092 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0414717937487 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107801725877 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0249889545118 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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