TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is crystally clear that education is a pivotal and inevitable portion of our life. Not only does it enable people to find a good job and well-paid career but also it contributes to development of any country. As a result, its quality would be the nexus of governments and universities. Some people believe that to improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. Whereas other people are not agree with it. Personally, although increasing university's teachers makes them to be more motivated, I believe it does not have a considerable impact on students who are going to have an impact on the future of their contries for two legitimate reasons.
To begin with, universities should spend more money on thier equipments. Motivated teachers can not have an sensible effect on education but well-equiped universities can provide well-qulified education at least for motivated students. For example, after my friend and I graduated from universities, each of us was admited in the same major but at distinct universities. My friends university had some equiped labrotories which was not comparable with my university. Althouth I am as intelligent as him and our professors at the universities were at the same level as each other, he is better than me in regard of practical issue because of the labs. It goes without saying that an equiped universities has a great impact on their quailty that they provided.
Second, universities had better to make students more motivated to study and do thier researchs. It is obvious that they will be future professors of our universities. If current universities do study and research better, they will improve the quality of education in the future. As a case in point, universities can award more honor students because of their university achivements. It enables thme to be more active. Also, they can send thier students to another university in other countries. It helps them to not only they learn other languages but they also learn about other professor in other universities.
To sum up, I completely disagree with the idea that to improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. Not only should universities spend more money on thier equipments but also they can make students to be more motivated. Universities should enables students more than professors.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 428, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... on salaries for university professors. Whereas other people are not agree with it. Per...
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Line 2, column 105, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...pments. Motivated teachers can not have an sensible effect on education but well-e...
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Line 4, column 305, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'enable'
Suggestion: enable
... be more motivated. Universities should enables students more than professors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, well, whereas, at least, for example, as a result, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2041.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18020304569 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06483510207 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456852791878 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.9103461777 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7727272727 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9090909091 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63636363636 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24258956704 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925853002677 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109434980316 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18021523465 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800349652701 0.0645574589148 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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