Doctors, Engineers, actors are some of job in each society. Having a job is so important because many aspect of men's life related to this, so people should be chose it meticulously. in this regard, many people wonder where is more enjoyable to have a job. there are many points of view in this issue. One stands in this issue is that it is more enjoyable to have a job where people work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. As far as I'm concerned, I concur with this idea. In following statements, I will provide two reason for my answer.
The first reason coming in my mind is that people who work only three days a week have more free time for spending with their household. therefore, it is more enjoyable for them because spending time with family members is so fun. they can do more entertainment than the second groups (people who work five days a week) don't. for example, they can travel the rest of week when they don't work, because they have 4 days for going to trip while the second groups don't have proper time for traveling.
The Second, if ones work 3 days at the beginning days of week other people can work at the rest of week. therefore, in this society people can find job easily, so this country will be vivacious. Since, people who don't have a job are gloom and depress. For example, according to the reports of Iran Estatistic Worker ( IEW), the majority of people in Iran are jobless and the most of them are dismal ,so they attempt to suicide. Only fewer of them adapt themselves to this condition. IEW asserts that if they had jobs, they never killed themselves. Therefore, having a job are enjoyable for people and people can find job in the first groups' society.
All in all, having a job where people work 3 days a week for long hours are more enjoyable, because they can spend more time with their family member, and people can find job easily. Therefore, isn't it better to stop five days a week work?
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun aspect seems to be countable; consider using: 'many aspects'.
Suggestion: many aspects
...y. Having a job is so important because many aspect of mens life related to this, so people...
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Suggestion: In
...people should be chose it meticulously. in this regard, many people wonder where i...
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Suggestion: There
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...ays a week for shorter hours. As far as Im concerned, I concur with this idea. In ...
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Suggestion: Therefore
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Suggestion: They
...ing time with family members is so fun. they can do more entertainment than the seco...
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Suggestion: Therefore
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Suggestion: don't
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Suggestion: ,
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'groups'' or 'group's'?
Suggestion: groups'; group's
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Suggestion: isn't
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Message: Did you mean 'betters', 'wells'?
Suggestion: betters; wells
...can find job easily. Therefore, isnt it better to stop five days a week work?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1633.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.40161725067 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24052945677 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428571428571 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0704525154 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.65 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.55 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.6 5.45110844103 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.435340485596 0.236089414692 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145049799681 0.076458572812 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152184020309 0.0737576698707 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.314788521478 0.150856017488 209% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0931740491378 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.74 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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