The employee enjoyment is a crucial factor that can increase the chance of company's success. A question that might arise is that whether company should employ their employers for more working days with fewer hours or fewer working days with more working hours? There might not be a general agreement on this topic. Personally, however, I rest on the belief that a job which has only three working days is more convinion rather than a job with more working days even although it has lass working time per day.
The first illustration which can demonstrate my opinion can be the longer vocation that the job, which has only three working days, has. Broadly speaking, employee can rest better with 5 days off instead of just 2 days. To clarify more, they can go travel, party, gathering with their friend, or anything else they want because they do not have time limitation, and they become more refresh and ready for new week; consequently their productivity and creativity at the work increase. Moreover, spending less time out of home is more enjoyable because of traffic and air pollution.
Also, it cannot go unnoticed that less working days per week is cost effective and when save more money is always enjoyble. Generally speaking, employee pay much money on their working days. to shed more light on this issue, they should pay for transportaion either public or personal transportation and they have to pay for food. Therefore, by reducing the time they spend out of home they can save money. In addition, they can find part time jobs for their vocation, nd it would make sense since they have long vocation, so they can make money and increase their salery due to they work in two places.
In the light of above-mentioned reasons, I am proponent of having less working time because not only does it have longer vocation, but also it is economical benefit. That is why i recommend people attend job where they can work for less days; however some people believe this will damage the productivity and creativity of employess.
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Suggestion: part-time
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, broadly speaking, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86246418338 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50358975777 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52435530086 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5065974516 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.133333333 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2666666667 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282174571982 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977312974932 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0790199085769 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192829796276 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659053903707 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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