A glance at modern people's lifestyles brings to light a question which has several times provoked discussion, namely, whether people are happier and more satisfied in today's world than before. Some might contend that people are happier because they now have more means of entertainment, better healthcare and fairer education. However, I would like to suggest that at present people are not as satisfied as before due to materialism, and busy work.
First and foremost, people are almost insatiable in terms of material. The development of technology has led to the mass production of various commodities, and people are constantly lured to spend their money. This is best illustrated with the example of cell phone market. The cell phone manufacturers update their products with remarkable speed, rendering even newly bought ones seem to be obsolete. Customers, especially young people, look forward to buying new ones, which they think makes them fashionable. Retailers' efforts to sell more products are also obvious in countless forms of TV and Internet commercials. So, with the advent of materialism, people hardly feel satisfied.
Secondly, as the world is changing and developing so fast, people are required to devote much time to their work and study to keep up the pace. In my country, China, for instance, high school students study for no less than sixteen hours a day, in order to outperform their peers in the College Entrance Exam. People also spend so much time on working to earn money and get promotion that they can seldom spare time to read a book or to take a walk. Sometimes people can not even figure out the meaning of what they are doing. Therefore, in a world that is changing swiftly, people simply do not have the time to enjoy the life.
What is more, people are also becoming increasingly realistic. Confronted with fierce competition, people's priority is their own benefits. As a result, students only care about test scores and ignore the importance of being a well-rounded youngster. Employers make themselves a plan to success and companies are willing to take any method to make profit. People are not to blame by doing so, because were they to make a living, they would have no other choices. It is no exaggeration to say that everything people do has a certain aim, and they hardly receive happiness and sense of satisfactory from it.
Due to the aforementioned ground, in a rapidly changing world, people are less happy than in the past, and materialism and pressure from life are two prime and conspicuous reasons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, as a result, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0093676815 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72968878285 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580796252927 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5922360008 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2272727273 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4090909091 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296289717819 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831202598288 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053525353309 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162377587855 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0110143136551 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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