World today is in the kaleidoscopic changes. Technology development broadens our world. We can travel fast to long distance and obtain information from all over the world. Hence we can say the world is dizzier than in the past. Besides that, the bustling world makes people less lively or less contented with their lives. I agree with this. And To enhance this view, I will describe two reasons in following paragraphs.
First of all, people are made a fool of them by overflowed information. Today people enjoy SNS like facebook, twitter, and Instagram. It enables people to connect with someone else quickly. It thrusts down to the desire which is never be gratified, Although it has the funny aspect that interaction with people who have the same hobby. For example, Instagramers who enjoy the Instagram. They always think to take a fashionable picture. There is viewpoint it is one of the new lifestyles. However, I argue that they are very person who is addicting. Since to take beautiful photos, Sometimes, they are doing the crazy thing such as buy sweets, take pictures then throw it away. They no longer do the SNS to share their daily life, they do the SNS to be in the limelight. The greed that wants to stand out never be fulfilled even if you are spotlighted. Therefore they are less satisfied with their lives.
Moreover, people focus on spending. The present world is full of things and information, and it quickly changes to other things.
To the best of my knowledge, criticism of consumption society began in the 1970s.
People are inclined to materialism and the number of people who do not know pleasure only to consume things also increased.Even though it was warned, we can't stop it.
Additionally, information is overflowed. Tons of info produce in a day, and everyone sees it from the smartphone. The particular experiment shows a significant amount of information exhaust the brain and decreases our ability of understanding. As a comprehension go down, the power of enjoying also go down.
To sum up, to take into account all materials, although the today world becomes more exciting, people do not know how to deal with it. And people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...in information from all over the world. Hence we can say the world is dizzier than in...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... fulfilled even if you are spotlighted. Therefore they are less satisfied with their live...
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Line 7, column 123, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Even
...e only to consume things also increased.Even though it was warned, we cant stop it. ...
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Line 7, column 153, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...increased.Even though it was warned, we cant stop it. Additionally, information is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, for example, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88020833333 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75819486057 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575520833333 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.069050283 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.6206896552 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.2413793103 20.6045352989 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.06896551724 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339065549916 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799561652236 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112351391741 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14187707302 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13107130797 0.0645574589148 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.14 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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