TPO 32
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In my opinion, adolescents have minor effect on the significant decisions. I feel this way for several main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, juveniles are less respected and considered as have no experience and knowledge to decide the marginal matters. Therefore, elders tend to disregard opinion of young generation because of the attitude that young people have no ability to reasonable conclusion. This is the reason why they are unable to involve in chief processes regardless of if they want or available to make acceptable judgement. For instance, in my country, many young correspondents write a letter to the president about major problems related to the nation. I have read many letters which is so reasonable that the idea can solve important problems in the country. Unfortunately, I am sure that the president has never seen some of them because the letters are considered as useless.
Secondly, there are few juveniles who can make justifiable choice and willing to do it since attitude of young generation is to develop themselves or expend time for recreations. Moreover, even young people will discourage their peers if their peers try to influence the major decisions because they consider that they must study and explore new things so that they will be capable of making the decision. Therefore, they are reluctant to involve in main decisions, which restricts them to affect the major choices. For instance, my friend, who wants to develop the nation as whole, started non-profit company whose purpose is to help impoverished individuals with the budget which they received from the charity. Unfortunately, her company was lacking in budget and she lost her commitment because she thought that she has not enough savvy and was being reprimanded by other people including people of the same age. Afterwards, she ended up making conclusion that she is not capable of influencing the society until she gets superb education and practical knowledge. Thereby, she lost her commitment and only willing to consume time for herself.
I am of the opinion that there is no effect made by adolescents in the chief decisions. This is because only few of the young generation are willing to change the situation of inferior society and elders tend to consider them as not prepared and unable to make reasonable conclusion.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...involve in chief processes regardless of if they want or available to make accept...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1988.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12371134021 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82416842693 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497422680412 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9345856536 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.941176471 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8235294118 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70588235294 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139633313349 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454140512977 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385455367324 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.084326787623 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338077401608 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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