There are certain considerations one can take into account to investigate and examine the influence of young adults on the future of the whole society. Someone contends that they do not have much impact because they are still relatively young, while I assert that our society's development is actually always under the influence of young people, not only because of their great power assisted by technology, but also because of their knowledge and thoughts.
First and foremost, the world alters swiftly these days, and everyone is experiencing a huge change in various aspects including transportation, health care and communication due to the advancement of technology. No one could deny the fact that our world will be defined and shaped by technology in the future, and it is those young man who know the technology better than any other age groups. Therefore, their deep understanding and skills in technology provides them more opportunities to make decisions in the workplace and influence the world greatly. Just imagine how Facebook found by Zuckerberg when he was in his twenties has connected the people around the globe and influenced both people's daily life and business.
Furthermore, young people's knowledge from high-qualified education is another noticeable factor. After entering 21th century, more and more youths in developing countries started to have access to higher education due to a soar in investment from their governments, which makes sure that they could learn more advanced knowledge and techniques compared to their parents' generation. With a huge number of new workforce with a college degree entering their careers, it is vividly clear they will bring some profits and make contributions that cannot be ignored and replaced.
Last but not least, an additional support comes into my mind is cooperation between young people with different culture context. Owing to the trend towards internationalization and market liberalization, young people are absolutely more open-minded, hence they are more willing to work together with peers from other countries, which is of vital importance if an enterprise or organization wants to remain competent these days. For instance, in an international company, it is always those young people who explore overseas market and make huge profits for their bosses. By doing so, they are actually influencing our society even without our notice.
Due to the aforementioned ground, I confidently claim that young adult have the ability to influence the society and change the world we live in.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, so, still, therefore, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2168.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37965260546 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98040610208 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595533498759 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.3465061138 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.857142857 100.406767564 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7857142857 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64285714286 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149552689133 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526824531403 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0235466452042 0.0737576698707 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0825116050833 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0177736986517 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 58.1214874552 60% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.52 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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