It is critically important that people should be involved with society and influence social events. Young people's effects on the future of countries are controversial among social members. I, personally, believe that Young people play a significant role in every committee to make a bright future for their world. In what follows, I elaborate on my viewpoint.
To begin with, the most number of people who protest were young ones in recent years. Young people try to receive their requests, although they are faced with the government's force. For example, one year ago, the price of gasoline increased by 30 percent in my country. As a result, nearly thirty thousand people came to the streets to show their disagreement with the government's decision. With a glance at the population, it was understood that most of them were young. The military shot them to spread away, but they persisted till they could. Finally, the government stated that the price would be decreased as soon as possible. It indicates that young people have a strong influence on the country's future.
Secondly, the young numbers of government officials increase rapidly. The crucial members of society had been older people; however, young people have replaced them. It indicates that young ones have significant effects on their society's future. Researchers mention that 95 percents of ministers in the united states were above sixty-years-old ones in the past decade. In contrast, their numbers decrease as time pass, and it reaches 70 percent. It can be inferred that the number of young people grew as ministers.
Finally, young people follow political and social news more than their parents do. The advent of the internet permits access information more straightforward than in the past so that young people can gain needed news. The analysis was accomplished two years ago at MIT university to determine people's age read social news. The results show that 80 percents of the reader were below 30 years old. This interest to pursue the news indicates that young people's effects on their society.
In conclusion, I believe that young members of society have substantial effects on their country. This is because young people try to receive their needs even by going to the streets, and the significant people in government become the younger generation. In addition, young people follow political news more times.
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- TPO 45 Integrated Writing Task 75
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16452442159 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66776619922 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514138817481 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.0251347674 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.2692307692 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9615384615 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96153846154 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187718854491 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633818975421 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479148713362 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125921532163 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262667706922 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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