In this day and age, a great emphasis has been placed on whether the usage of electronic devices such as cellphones and the time dedicated to online games, surfing the net and social networks has a destructive impact on children. This has triggered so many arguments on the level of their education. From my perspective, if parent are not capable of restricting their children from over using these new technologies, these devices can actually prevent their kids from learning properly and efficiently. I feel this way as all of these technologies can be time consuming and can distract them and prevent them from concentrating on their assignments and studies.
To start, some point out that nowadays children and mostly teenagers dedicate more than 4 hours of a day playing video games, watching videos from Netflix and Youtube and surfing the net on their phones. Therefore, a large scale of the time they could have spent on studying is wasted doing tasks which can have a little or no advantage for them. One of my personal experiences is a compelling illustration of this. During our senior year of highschool we had to study long hours to be prepared for our university entrance exams and I remember so many of student complaining that they could not find sufficient time to study in evening because the spent long hours on their cell phones. Based on this, I strongly believe that these new trends may provide fun activities for spare times but it's too consuming to let students free enough time to study as well.
Furthermore, concentrating on a task demands full attention and focus. It is generally accepted that social media has increasingly absorbed people's attention to itself. This can prevent students from concentrating on what they are studying.For instance, many people check their instagram instantly to see whether a celebrity has posted something or not. Also, as it can be observed in so many schools and universities students are allowed to have their cellphones on them during class time. This they may continuously check their phone or text each other during the time which they should actually listen to their professors and teachers.
However, some people may mention that cellphones can actually be used as a mean of education, providing some visual aid for them during class time. While this is true, I strongly believe that its merits can not overcome its drawbacks and although new technologies has been beneficial for students they have caused them learning difficulties both during school time and when they are studying at home.
To sum up, I generally believe that educating children has become harder and more frustrating as they spend more and more of their time playing games or checking contents on the internet. I feel this way because these activities are too time consuming and may cause difficulty for them to concentrate on what they are trying to learn.
- TPO 40 integrated writing 80
- TPO 35 Integrated Writing Task 90
- TPO 36 integrated writing
- TPO 41 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 70
- TPO 37 Integrated writing 45
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 241, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...concentrating on what they are studying.For instance, many people check their insta...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...me and when they are studying at home. To sum up, I generally believe that edu...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, i feel, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2427.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00412371134 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73563572826 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492783505155 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 740.7 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.0305368739 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.833333333 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9444444444 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135507475721 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490544479528 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403004679386 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0909869390825 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450420594336 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 241, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...concentrating on what they are studying.For instance, many people check their insta...
^^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...me and when they are studying at home. To sum up, I generally believe that edu...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, i feel, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2427.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00412371134 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73563572826 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492783505155 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 740.7 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.0305368739 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.833333333 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9444444444 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135507475721 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490544479528 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403004679386 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0909869390825 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450420594336 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.