TPO 35. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
The famous entertainers and athletes are well known with the societies; therefore, most people are excited and curious about their life and usually intrusive in their privet issues. Now, there is a controversy about whether the famous people of the communities deserve more privacy or not. In my way of thinking, celebrities deserve more privacy because not only have the people's intrusives made their life more difficult, but also it has provided a field for rumors.
The first reason which should be stated here is that the intrusive behavior of people has ruined the life of famous athletes and entertainers. People are always curious about celebrities life, and it has been a custom in the societies that a part of the news is allocated to the celebrity's life. This intrusive behavior destroys their life because any particular event in their life will be judged by the majority of the community. All people do not know all the details of the event. They just judge the celebrity whether it is right or not. These judges will destroy the person's life. As the famous people have tried a lot in their life to achieve their goal, they do not deserve difficulties which are emerged by the intrusive behavior of the community.
The other point which deserves some words here is that if people do not keep the reputed people's privacy, the rumors will spread through the society. Some people try to abuse the intrusive behavior of the people to publish wrong news on the celebrity's life in order to attract more contacts and customers. These craft people take advantages of the famous people for their own purposes. In addition, the rumors quickly will be spread all over the society by gossips and will mislead the people about the facts. Generally, if people do not try to encroach the privacy of the life of the celebrities, such events will not happen.
To summarize, famous entertainers and athletes deserve more privacy because they can not have a normal life while being judged by other people. Also, some creepy people will abuse this intrusive behavior for their personal advantages by spreading rummers.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 574, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...t or not. These judges will destroy the persons life. As the famous people have tried a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, well, while, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93837535014 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49187020131 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448179271709 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0252025225 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.705882353 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58823529412 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167609940085 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072366538598 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825810192831 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144574544736 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734843198058 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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