tpo 4- independent writing
Nowadays, I see many people that prefer to use their own car rather than public transportation. So, the amount of cars increase rapidly. Also, there are many cars in roads and streets compared to the past. In my opinion, because of many reasons this trend will be continuoued.
First of all, the modern society makes people very lazy. People are not very pationt. because of this bad feature, they want everything soon. They want to be in the destination as soon as possible. Thus, they can not stand the crowded society and they refuse using the public transportation. Also people do not have more time to waste. People are very busy and they want do their actions soon. Using public transportation needs to stand in lines and spend time. This causes using more cars. So, everyday the amount of car are increasing.
Secondly, I think new technologies and advertisments are other factors that take part in increasing the cars. Maybe it seems that these factors are not related to each other, but you are wrong. They ralated together. By developing the technology cars develop too. Everyday companies build new cars. I, personally, know many people that they are interested in new cars. People admire the new technologies that used in cars. Their shape, their glorious colors with especial pigments, their speed are factors that absorb the eyes. The factories show these facinating cars in colorful advertisments and they persuade people to believe that they need these cars. People like these cars, so they buy them. Now, imagine the world. Everyday cars that added to the world increase.
Finally, I have to say that twenty years later we will live in a world with abundant cars. whether I want it or not it is hapening and it is not avoidable.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 87, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...ery lazy. People are not very pationt. because of this bad feature, they want everythi...
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Line 2, column 293, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...refuse using the public transportation. Also people do not have more time to waste. ...
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Line 2, column 374, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e. People are very busy and they want do their actions soon. Using public transpo...
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Line 2, column 497, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... time. This causes using more cars. So, everyday the amount of car are increasing. Seco...
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Line 4, column 91, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whether
...ill live in a world with abundant cars. whether I want it or not it is hapening and it ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, may, second, secondly, so, thus, i think, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1450.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84949832776 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53556706589 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531772575251 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 10.0 20.1344086022 50% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.9733428497 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 51.7857142857 100.406767564 52% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 10.6785714286 20.6045352989 52% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.8 11.7677419355 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.79 58.1214874552 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.67 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.0 10.0537634409 60% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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