TPO-40 - Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Never before in the history has the problem of education been such salient than today that whether parents should offer children money for their grades in recent years. In my opinion, its merits weigh out its drawbacks for the following reasons.

To begin with, children can pay more concentration on study due to the reward of money. Once they get money, there’s no doubt that they will try harder to get more money than the last time which means costing more time on study and reducing the time wasting on watching TV or playing games. And I will take myself as an example. Ten years ago, when I was just a primary school student, my parents cared about my study because I was addicted to playing games. At that time a new Play Station is my dream, however, I didn’t have enough money. Then I was told that if I can get a high grade, they will reward me enough money to buy it. To my parents’ surprise, after that, I paid more time on study and reduced time of playing. What a good idea! This is really good to improve children’s study.

Then, it can effectively improve children’s ability of managing money in a young age. Nowadays, parents need to equip children with some skills and abilities to be prosperous in their future life and career. If a person cannot use money reasonable, he will never feel happy even for a millionaire. But as we can use this way to force them manage their money, it is possible that they can learn how to spend money. Also in the last example, when I finally got the money by three month’s hard work, I thought it was inadvisable that wasting all money for a new one. The better choice for me is to use just half of the price to buy a second-hand and save other money. Without this good idea, I may never have the chance to learn how to use money effectively.

Admittedly, some worries that this method causes some children forget their initial target, thus just caring about money not the study. But this is not a case if we just give them a little. What’s more, too much money for a child who does not have enough power to identify the goods is really dangerous.

In a conclusion, offering money for children’s growth of study can really benefit them in both their study and the ability of controlling money.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Never' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
Never before in the history has the problem o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, really, second, so, then, thus, as to, no doubt, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57142857143 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53256264767 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523002421308 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7754744003 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9047619048 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47619047619 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252577563122 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801925085322 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444679327118 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146723375429 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294143416052 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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