Every parents have their own method in raising their children. However, some people might disagree, I believe it is a good idea for parents to offer their children, who are school students, money in exchange for their high grades. I hold three reasons for my opinion; motivation, developing a sense of hard working, and managing finance.
First of all, parents, when offering their children money for each high grades of theirs, are motivating them. Although, children should be taught to take care of their home works, nowadays, with lots of distractions that students are facing, like video games or social media, parents should come up with new ways of making children interested in studying. Offering them money in exchange for high grades is a proper method to address this issue.
Secondly, it will develop a sense of hard working in children when they are being rewarded. As parents offer money to their children for high grades they get, they are showing them that every hard work will eventually pay off and the fact that children have to try more and more in their lives if they want to have more. By doing this, while children will improve their grades, they will carry on this ability of theirs as they grow up and take advantage of it in the future.
Finally, children will learn to manage their finance. Having the ability to manage ones finance, is an important skill that every adult should have. As parents pay children money, it looks like they have a part-time job of their own which leads to the fact that they start saving up and managing their expenses in such young age. As a result, they turn to be skill full adults in managing their financial issues.
To sum up, there are lots of approaches parents can take toward raising their children. In my perspective, there are some advantages in offering money from parents to children for their high grades. Motivation, developing sense of hard working, and managing finance are three of the reasons I hold for believing so.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
Every parents have their own method in raisin...
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Line 1, column 166, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ea for parents to offer their children, who are school students, money in exchange for ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, while, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1664.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83720930233 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34029502423 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485465116279 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3988453462 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341217817242 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130181396831 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885305342568 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213690496918 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055952034375 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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