Nowadays, because of the super busy society, every parent finds not enough leisure time to spend with their children. There is one controversial question coming up to parents which it is better to spend that little amount of spare time to help their children's homework or play with them and spend it as an enjoyable time, from my point of view the parents should spend their spare time with their children to play games or sport in order to create friendly atmosphere in the home.
First and foremost, memory is the only thing that left when time passes. So, I think parents should spend time fun with children to create a great childhood memory of their children. Also, when parents teaching the school work to the children, most of the time they become angry which causes to harm the relationship between them. From my personal experience, I confidently say that the spending time with parents becomes rarer as a child grows up.
Another significant point which should be considered is that the fact that nowadays children spend much time on playing the game with their families such as online games and sport but there is evidence showing that besides the drawback these activities lead the children to become more intelligent, and also these activities boost children’s self-confidence and improve their self-esteem. The statistical shows that the children who spend more time with their parents to having fun are more likely to get a higher grade than other children. From my personal experience, when I was a kid my parents worked all the days and night and they hadn’t spare time to play with me so I always got a bad grade in my school so if my parents had played with me in my childhood I would have gotten the better grade.
To make a long story short, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons I encourage the parents to spend more time with their children and having fun with them in order to increase their self-confidence and also enhance their productivity, it is indisputable that parents play a pivotal role in teaching and guidance children.
- TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task 76
- TOEFL T P O 43 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun to play games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th 60
- TPO Extra1People learn things better from those at their own level such as fellow students or co workers than from those at a higher level such as teachers or supervisors 65
- TOEFL T P O 40 - Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 292, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'harming'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: harming
...the time they become angry which causes to harm the relationship between them. From my ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87005649718 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69009624923 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485875706215 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 112.756374543 48.9658058833 230% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 172.4 100.406767564 172% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.4 20.6045352989 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340121693121 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176538713236 0.076458572812 231% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578658375156 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251024147729 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255219582579 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 11.7677419355 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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