TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

A glance at how today's parents spend time with their children brings to light a question that has several times provoked discussions, that is, whether parents should spend time playing with their children, or helping them with their schoolwork. Some might contend that since parents are too busy to supervise their children's studies, it is advisable to use every single second they spent with their children on study. However, if I were a parent, I would prefer to play with my children in leisure time.

To begin with, it is undeniable that the priority of parents is to provide their kids with love and care. At present, adults spend so much time on work that children could feel ignored or even abandoned when their parents are not with them. Thus, it is important for parents to communicate and interact with their kids, and the best way to do so is to play games or sports with them. When playing, both children and parents can temporarily forget about the problems they had in study or work, and will be able to truly enjoy the intimate relationship between each other.

Secondly, since knowledge is expanding with remarkable speed in modern society, the role parents can play in facilitating children with their studies is really limited. For example, the students could be learning about scientific discoveries made in the past decades, so the parents themselves is likely to have problem understanding those new theories, not to mention answering questions raised by their children. In fact, it is the teachers' responsibility to help children with their problems in study.

Admittedly, there are some justifications by those who believe that parents should use their time spent with children to help them with study. To play is the nature of children, so it is definitely necessary for parents to monitor their children on study, preventing them from wasting too much time on things that are irrelevant to study. Nonetheless, I still affirm that parents should educate their children to be self-displined and teach them to arrange their time reasonably, which could cultivate their ability to study by themselves and benefit the kids in the long run. On the contrary, if they only care about their kids' study when they are with them, not only would the effects be limited, but the children will also be unable to be independent.

Due to aforementioned ground, it is absolutely worthwhile for busy parents to play games or sports with their children when they are free, and a better relationship between the two generations and limited help from parents on study are two prime and conspicuous reasons.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 435, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...d by their children. In fact, it is the teachers responsibility to help children with th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nonetheless, really, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, for example, in fact, on the contrary, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2185.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66832174462 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475972540046 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.1491664131 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.666666667 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1333333333 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.26666666667 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341268449469 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141251451728 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698254191633 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207067544065 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734005692683 0.0645574589148 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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