Albeit in the past, most mothers spent their whole time at house with their children, parents are busy with their job in this modern age, and to keep up with the technology, they had to spend more time working each day in comparison to the day before. It's been a wide concern between parents how to spend time with their children so that children won't feel neglected. Some parents prefer to spend this limited time with them enjoying and having fun doing things such as going to parks or playing a game. On the other hand, some parents would rather help their children in schoolwork. I'm amongst the second group, and if I become a mother in the future, I'd rather use this time to assist my kids for homework and so on. Now I try to vindicate my reasons in the following article.
To begin with, in my opinion, know children their parent take care about their schoolwork and education, they will pay more attention to it. Education has become a hot issue in this era. Children paying more attention to it, will be more successful in the future. Yet, children by themselves flee from doing school work and their parents' attention is very significant and plays a major key. As a personal experience, I didn't like to study nor do homework when I was in elementary school. However, after my mother talked to me and spent time to help me get interested in school stuff, I became keen on studying. Soon after that, I did everything by myself eagerly.
Moreover, I suppose parents had better be involved in their children's life. As children spend most of their day at school, parent aren't entailed in their life unless knowing about their schoolwork. Parents should be aware of what is happening at school with their kids. Additionally, not taking care about their school life, children won't talk about their various problems faced each day. Consequently, they will grow so helpless and miserable and they won't ask for help from anybody. As instance, once my parents were on a long trip because of their job and I spent time with my old grandmother. When I got home every day after school, I couldn't talk to anybody. After all, my grandmother was too old to understand my problems. I felt miserable at those days; thus, I don't want to recall them at all. My parents returning home, I talked about all that had bothered me at school and I felt much better.
To make the long story short, parents are the most precious thing to children, and children need their help in every stage of their life. Schoolwork is the most significant part of children's life as they spend about 8 hours per day at school, and lots of time doing homework. Thus, we come to this conclusion that parents must spend time with them to show their great consideration about their life and success in the future. Even though spending time to enjoy moments and have fun is essential too, paying attention to children's life is more important.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
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- TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the mothers') or simply say ''most mothers''.
Suggestion: most of the mothers; most mothers
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, after all, as to, i suppose, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2386.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61508704062 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42413713642 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487427466151 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 712.8 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8052628266 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.44 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.68 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280334639488 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905395205444 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073963580504 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205933563203 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0942998919272 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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