The majority of people who are in their early to mid-twenties think that the best way for parents is to have fun playing games with their children when parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children. They support that playing games makes their children to relieve their stress at their school. However, the notion does not reflect the stance that I hold and should be thought about in a different light. I believe that the best way for parents is to do something together related to schoolwork. This is because this contains an educational process and they are able to build relationship with their children.
First of all, doing something together that are related to schoolwork involved in an educational process. To be specific, parents’ doing things that are related to schoolwork enables their children to be interested in their schoolwork. Children create opportunities for improving their educational understanding. Education is the strongest weapon to change the world they live as well as their lives. To illustrate, Steve Jobs, who is the founder of Apple, made great accomplishments in his life time. I read online that he was very successful because his parents had time doing things together that are related to schoolwork when he was a child, even they do not have a lot of time to spend with him. He did this better by sharing his time with their children, doing things together that are related to schoolwork. This proves that it is the best way for parents to use their time doing things together that are related to schoolwork.
Moreover, parents are able to build relationships with their children with doing thing together that are related to schoolwork. In addition, when they share time and solve their children’s problems related to schoolwork they did not resolved, their children would respect their children more than before. Building relationship not only is the best way to create a strong connection with others but also in the long-run, makes people to enjoy a better quality of life with sharing each other’s feelings. For example, when I was young, my parents always was not at home, in their work place. At that time, I had lack of time with my parents. However, when they returned from work, they always took care of my school work, even we did not share a lot of time. From that time, I have respected my parents as they did. Through this experience, I learned that using time that do things together that are related to schoolwork is the best way for parent to build relationships with their children.
To sum up, I believe that the best way for parents is to do something together related to school work : containing an educational process and building relationship with their children. All things I have mentioned, it is my belief that my argument regarding this topic has been effectively and precisely delivered with the reasons.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 496, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...pple, made great accomplishments in his life time. I read online that he was very success...
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Line 3, column 238, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'resolve'
Suggestion: resolve
...lems related to schoolwork they did not resolved, their children would respect their chi...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'so', 'well', 'for example', 'in addition', 'as well as', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.221818181818 0.229887763892 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.209090909091 0.158761421928 132% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0509090909091 0.0866891130778 59% => OK
Adverbs: 0.06 0.046263068375 130% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0981818181818 0.0685040099705 143% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.105454545455 0.118717715034 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0581818181818 0.0351676179071 165% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.73831567868 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0509090909091 0.0309702414327 164% => OK
Particles: 0.00181818181818 0.00188951952338 96% => OK
Determiners: 0.0690909090909 0.0887237588012 78% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00363636363636 0.0209618222197 17% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.02 0.0139019557991 144% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2904.0 2387.08602151 122% => OK
No of words: 493.0 408.028673835 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.89046653144 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.324543610548 0.338922669872 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.255578093306 0.251872472559 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.172413793103 0.174417080927 99% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.113590263692 0.112833075102 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73831567868 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.379310344828 0.524397521467 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 42.685107335 59.2087087015 72% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.4347826087 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.260746976 48.84282405 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.260869565 120.699889404 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4347826087 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.608695652174 0.644075263715 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 46.9925919393 45.7405998639 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.0495049505 1.45489161554 72% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.546116393894 0.300154397459 182% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.177036576606 0.103427244359 171% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.124796079312 0.0752933317313 166% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.497957474658 0.497263757937 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153757361185 0.151897553556 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.22259939444 0.114077575197 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123432823797 0.0781384742642 158% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.546877153958 0.336927656856 162% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.104701724051 0.067059652881 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.42478916611 0.210909579961 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685690023459 0.0618886996521 111% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 16.0 8.42114695341 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.6433691756 161% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.