Tpo 44Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are relate

Many parents are busy and have limited time to spend with their children. Some people think that these parents should use this limited time to have fun or play games with their children while others think that it is better to use this time to help children with their schoolwork. I believe, although helping children with schoolwork is necessary, parents are not qualified enough to help their children with schoolwork. And playing games or sports would benefit both parties and help them strengthens their relationship.

Children have different courses in the school that each one needs a special requirement. Parents neither can concentrate on all these courses nor they are qualified for helping in all these courses. Nevertheless, the busy parents don't have time to spend on all of them. A better option is handing this responsibility to someone with required qualification, like a tutor. In this way, parents can be sure that their child receives a professional help in his or her schoolwork. As a successful experience, I can mention my uncle's case where he was quite happy with this method.

Playing games or sports are helpful for both parents and children. Parents can have a better relationship with their children if they do joyful things with their children. It helps children to overcome the loneliness feeling if there is any and similarly it helps parents to relax for some time and put their work problems away. As an example, consider a busy couple who work 12 hours a day, have they enough mental energy to help their children with schoolwork? I do not think so. However, a joyful physical activity can make the family happy.

Overall, also children need help with their schoolwork, playing games or sport is more advantageous for the family as a whole.

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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...courses. Nevertheless, the busy parents dont have time to spend on all of them. A be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, nevertheless, similarly, so, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1483.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 298.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97651006711 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67463137434 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496644295302 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 438.3 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9439654222 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2352941176 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5294117647 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47058823529 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322556708884 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125730285146 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11332989942 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209514884412 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100932539937 0.0645574589148 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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