Nowadays, the living conditions is quite different from the past. Parents are required to work hard until night to make money in order to make a convenient life for their children. Thus, they rarely have enough time to spend with their kids. In this regard, there is a controversy among people regarding how it would be better for parents to spend their time with their children. A group of people believe that it would be better for parents to have fun with their children and playing games or sports with them, whereas the other group of people believe that the best use of the time that parents can spend with their children is that they do their children assignments with them. Personally, I prefer the former. In the following, I will attempt to support this idea through 2 reasons.
The first point to be mentioned is that children can do their assignments in their schools. They can do their homework better with their classmates. One of the advantages of school is that children can learn how to deal with their problems by participating in group activities, like group studies. One of the benefits of every group study is that children can have interaction with each other. They can use the other's experiments and ideas in order to solve their problems. Thus, children can learn and do better in school and it would not be necessary for parents to help them with the assignments, so that parents can spend their free time with their children to play games and sports.
The second reason which deserves some words here is that by having fun with their children, parents can build a good friendship with them. Unfortunately, there is a wide gap between parents and children. Modern life is quite different from the past. As the time passes, parents are more likely to get away from their children owing to the fact that they have to work hard until night in order to make money for their families and children spend a little time with them. Besides, children now spend most of their time in the school with their friends. They see their parents only at the dinner table. Thus there is a poor connection between parents and their children. In this regard, parents can make a good friendship with their children by playing games and sports with them. Through these games, they can find out about their children interests, which help them to have a good conversation with them. Thus, by spending time in the form of playing games and sports, parents can abolish the gap existed between them and their children and build a good friendship with them.
To put it in a nutshell, the best use of the time that parents can spend with their children is to have fun with them owing to the fact that children can do their assignments in their schools with their classmates and there is no need for their parents help. Besides, parents can know their children better by playing with them and they can make a good friendship through having fun with their children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 600, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...their parents only at the dinner table. Thus there is a poor connection between pare...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, regarding, second, so, thus, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 52.1666666667 174% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2442.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68714011516 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33593115413 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.337811900192 0.524837075471 64% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.4058477032 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.68 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.84 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.24 5.45110844103 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380373127782 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141175453206 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112180803664 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.312013720998 0.150856017488 207% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590942996975 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.3 8.01818996416 79% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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