In today's societies , the question of whether the dependency of young people to their parents in terms of making decision decreases in comparison to past time or not has become a controversial issue among people in many circles and camps. Different people have various types of responses to this topic based on their social, cultural, or even familial backgrounds. However, as far as I'm concerned, I believe that the reliability of today's juvenile to their parents to make decisions reduce significantly over a decades for some reasons that I elaborate them in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the first thing immediately come to mind is that the method of learning in schools was changed noticeably during the last decades. In new this new method, students' need to their parent to accomplish their assignment diminish significantly. Accordingly, students learn how they can implement their assignment and responsibilities alone and they can improve their personality to be less reliable to their parents. Therefore, they can easily make a lot of decisions in future without any helps. Let's make a brief explanation about that. Based on the researches that were published in the well-known journals, as long as new learning methods was applied in the Tehran, the number of the parents who involved to their parents assignment have diminish remarkably.
Another noteworthy aspect that should be mentioned is that the parents viewpoint toward their children have also alter during last decades. In other words, most of the new parent's are highly engaged in their jobs and have little time to intervene in any of children's affairs. So, parents have to change their opinion and let their young people stay on their own feet. Hence, juvenile become more independent and find an opportunity to decide by himself. Let me shed a light on my point. According to the survey that was conducted in the Iran, scientists found out that parents have less than 2 hours per day to dedicate to their children. Thus, young people gradually learn how to make an important decision by himself.
In conclusion, there are a plenty of reason to show that today's juvenile are very different from those who lived in the past, in the context of decision making. Not only the learning method of school change strikingly over this time but also parents modify their opinion about how their grow their children. Consequently, it is obvious that any person can notice this changes in juvenile.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2072.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07843137255 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74527817686 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536764705882 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8298232345 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.052631579 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4736842105 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15789473684 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332212974913 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104849198801 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878134529575 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221751402763 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0857441166483 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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