Generally speaking, people often possess different point of view on this issue. As for me, I highly recommend that the opinions of celebrities are more important to younger people than older people. Here are some of reasons as below.
To begin with, teenagers are usually care about their peer’s feeling and the opinions of celebrities will affect them deeply. For example, teenagers often love certain idols and their will try to find someone who also obsessed with them. Plus, what the idols wear on or comments will become a trend for teenagers to follow. Therefore, teenagers spend lots of money on their idol so that other peers will feel like they need to do the same thing in order to make friends.
Second, older people are calm so the opinions of famous entertainers does little impact on them. To be more specific, old people usually put emphasis on living and they care more about their families. Besides, they have to manage the whole families from their jobs every day. Therefore, the opinions of well-known entertainers are less beneficial to them. On the contrary, young people are often impulsive and think not too much. They are easily affected by the celebrities than older people.
In conclusion, I think young people are easily influenced by the celebrities. Since they care about their peer and also impulsive than older people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 209, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the reasons') or simply say ''some reasons''.
Suggestion: some of the reasons; some reasons
...nger people than older people. Here are some of reasons as below. To begin with, teenagers a...
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Line 3, column 38, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'cared'.
Suggestion: cared
... To begin with, teenagers are usually care about their peer's feeling and the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, second, so, therefore, well, as for, for example, i think, in conclusion, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1139.0 1977.66487455 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 227.0 407.700716846 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01762114537 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46701541789 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 212.727598566 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568281938326 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 355.5 618.680645161 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.6354040237 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.9333333333 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1333333333 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231774387931 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834559931386 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667596280538 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155864859172 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062324234343 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.24 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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