As various social media and television shows become more accessible, celebrities such as entertainers or athletes are increasingly well-known worldwide. Some people state that the remarks and behaviors of celebrities have more effect on the youth than the elder. In my opinion, celebrities are more influential to young people and my perspective is based on the following reasons.
First of all, young people tend to imitate the celebrities' dress style as they want to keep up with the latest trends and achieve peer recognition. They adore as well as admire personalities' energetic and charming images, discussing about how to resemble them. The Korean super stars are adored especially by the youth and their fashionable styles are specifically mimicked as they typify popular symbols. Hence, many teenagers perceive these super stars as their icons.
Second, apart from fame and appearance, some personalities represent success and victory that encourage many young people. Unlike the elder generation who has achieved their objectives, the young generation requires inspiring stories to convince them that dreams are attainable. Many Taiwanese high school students are fascinated by Jimmy Lin, the famous NBA basketball player, not just because he is the only Asia player but also as his positive and strong will is so encouraging. Therefore, celebrities' hard work and perseverance also impact each dreaming young soul.
Last but not least, the young are more inclined to feel lost while encountering setbacks or hardships as they have not yet formed their own values like the elder. In fact, they are amenable to all kinds of opinions and lack mature judgments. Consequently, admiring certain celebrity provides them a simple faith or principle to cling to.
To sum up, I believe young people are more susceptible to the remarks of celebrities as they need someone to admire and follow.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, apart from, in fact, such as, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3745819398 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84049089011 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.638795986622 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1641231308 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.133333333 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9333333333 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6 5.45110844103 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135390971089 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453621403785 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381236364044 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0811248681191 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420883589857 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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