In general, the remarks and behavior of celebrities are considered quite influential. Some people think that opinions of personalities are more important to the young generation than the elder. I agree with the statement and my perspective is based on the following reasons.
For one thing, the youth have strong desires for peer acceptance and approval in comparison with the elder. To achieve peer recognition, young people are eager to keep up with the latest trend in case that they cannot join the popular topics discussed by their friends. When I was in high school, everyone paid much attention to Jeremy Lin, a world-renowned NBA basketball player. Even though some girls weren't interested in basketball, they still pretended they loved him so that they could acquire the sense of involvement. This irrational crush on Jeremy Lin is also referred to as '' Linsanity'' since virtually everyone loved him no matter they cared about basketball or not at the time.
For another, the personalities are able to project a youthful and energetic image that young people are proud to identify with. Unlike the elder, who have formed their own values with rich life experience, adolescents need a convincing principle as well as inspiring stories that encourage them to pursue their dreams. Take my best friend for example. She adores a charming singer so much that she does not only imitate her wearing but also follow her remarks as a key to attain her objectives. Believe it or not, she even takes notes of the singer's suggestions and memorizes them as best as she can.
Furthermore, some schools and educational institutions also invite popular celebrities to give speeches as they believe that these icons have great influence on the youth. I can still recall that a famous athlete was invited to our graduation ceremony and that everyone was so attentive without whispering. Eventually, each graduate was encouraged by the athlete and gained more faith to face the competitive future.
Based on the aforesaid, I strongly agree that personalities are more influential to the young generation as they need someone to admire and follow, guiding them through countless setbacks and confused moments.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, still, well, for example, in general, as well as, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1851.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17039106145 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81051258547 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59217877095 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3243367458 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.882352941 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0588235294 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58823529412 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133818976334 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436805708728 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049283488371 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0855825580573 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0577107959267 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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