TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

Submitted by ultra7677 on Tue, 10/04/2016 - 16:51

With the fast development of technology, we can access to news more convenient than the past. Some people think that it is unnecessary for an individual to know the events which will not affect his daily life, however, I personally agree with the view that people should know about events which are happening around the world, and there are serval reasons to support that view.

First, for those people who want success in their life, it is necessary for them to have some knowledge about events which are occurring in different areas. When people know more information about the society, they can use those information to help them judge which area is more potential in the future. For instance, Jack Ma, after he knows that the Internet is fast developing in US, he comes to the judgement that the IT industry will also wide spread in China, so he decided to start a company doing Internet business in China. As a result, this company -- Alibaba becomes one of the biggest IT companies in today's world.

Furthermore, knowing what is happening around the world makes people more prepared for incoming economic crisis, so that they could save more money. Since the world's economy is far more connected than before, it is easier for an economic crisis spread around the world. For example, the economic crisis in 2008 makes lots of banks lose all of their money, as a consequence, people can not take their money back during this situation. If people get prepared when this crisis is happing in US and withdraw their money in the bank before the crisis's influence has come, their loss will be much less.

Finally, people's life will be more enjoyable if they take a look at different funny stories around the world. Nowadays, most of people have substantial pressure to suffer, to be more motivated in life, they need something makes them relax. For example, a TV program about different countries's funny stores, this kind of humour in life is benefit for people's mental health, and somehow improves people's satisfaction about their life.

In conclusion, there are lots of benefits for people to know more things happening in the world. They can not only have more opportunities to be successful, but also reduce their loss in a economic crisis and live a happier life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 224, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'those informations'?
Suggestion: this information; those informations
...rmation about the society, they can use those information to help them judge which area is more p...
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Line 3, column 418, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: the; IT
...g in US, he comes to the judgement that the IT industry will also wide spread in China...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'worlds'' or 'world's'?
Suggestion: worlds'; world's
...t they could save more money. Since the worlds economy is far more connected than befo...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 121, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...nny stories around the world. Nowadays, most of people have substantial pressure to suffer, to...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 188, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ccessful, but also reduce their loss in a economic crisis and live a happier life...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'kind of', 'as a result']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.247113163972 0.229887763892 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.152424942263 0.158761421928 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.080831408776 0.0866891130778 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0438799076212 0.046263068375 95% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0554272517321 0.0685040099705 81% => OK
Prepositions: 0.140877598152 0.118717715034 119% => OK
Participles: 0.0277136258661 0.0351676179071 79% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.43225638809 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0254041570439 0.0309702414327 82% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0877598152425 0.0887237588012 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0230946882217 0.0209618222197 110% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0184757505774 0.0139019557991 133% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2276.0 2387.08602151 95% => OK
No of words: 390.0 408.028673835 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.8358974359 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.338461538462 0.338922669872 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.217948717949 0.251872472559 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.146153846154 0.174417080927 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0948717948718 0.112833075102 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43225638809 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507692307692 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 55.4387577921 59.2087087015 94% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6684587814 73% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.5533526081 127% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6464872095 48.84282405 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.733333333 120.699889404 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.5533526081 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.933333333333 0.644075263715 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 47.7948717949 45.7405998639 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.65137614679 1.45489161554 114% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321525531013 0.300154397459 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.134097010113 0.103427244359 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0712035599082 0.0752933317313 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.593883813913 0.497263757937 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.108777459159 0.151897553556 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139175762733 0.114077575197 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785804647627 0.0781384742642 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.311217637758 0.336927656856 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.045952965825 0.067059652881 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215328211011 0.210909579961 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0866048545032 0.0618886996521 140% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.6433691756 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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