TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

There is no doubt that the new world being so small because of the recent technology and communication forms. According to my view i agree that it is important to have a knowledge about the events happening all over the world and i think that these events have a role may be indirect into my life and there is the explanation.

First, I'm Egyptian and i used to live in Egypt until I have been finished my graduate and i was decided to have a job overseas. Finally, after a lot of applying I received an approval form a petroleum company at Saudi Arabia. After working for three months at this company, I was very surprised and asked more and more why I did not have my salary until now. My workmates laughed at me and said that it is the recent situation because of the economic decline in the country and they said, you seemed that you did not watched the news. If i were known, i would elected another country.

In addition to that point, I'm a biochemist and doctoral researcher. when i was supposed to complete buying the chemicals required for my research, I surprised that the price of the chemicals was increased triply from the last time i bought it and the chemical company argued the increasing is about the increased value of dollar. If i were known that, i would paid more quantity of chemicals.

Lastly, i think that the world events may have a pleasant effect into my life. For instance, the world cup event. The world cup is the most important event that happen every four years. At the last world cup I was watched it with my friends at coffee shop and I said there many people even young, old, man or women. We supported our national team and were proud of it's performance at the game.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, lastly, may, so, for instance, i think, in addition, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.43174603175 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44766639857 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539682539683 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5212339134 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0666666667 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129911185014 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458376628109 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562453626528 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0839495008654 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631691687784 0.0645574589148 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.41 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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