The ability to keep frendship has played a prevailing role in every individual's life. In this regard, there is a long-standing discussion among academicians about how people can maintain friendships resulting happiness. Some people are leading proponents of the claim that few number of persons over a long time is more significant in this regard rather tnan make more new friends. I am o the opinion that small number of people lead to happiness. In the following essay , I will elaborate on my view point through two noticeable reasons.
First of all, long friendships have more stability. In other words,in the long run, people get familiar with all of aspect of their friends whether they can count on their help in a emergency situation or not. For example, when I enrolled in univerity about six years ago, I got familiar with one of my close friends there and we are friends up until now. Not only has she great and stable personality, but also she is kind. Had I not gone to that university and not got familiar with her, I would not be feel happiness now. This example illustrated that stability has a key role in every friendships.
Secondly, few number of friends but over a long period of time are true friends. the indication of a real friends only identify several years after friendship. The result of a recent study conducted in my country indicate that, if people can keep their friendship after seven years, they could nominated them on part of family not only a friend. This example demonstrate importance of maintain close friends for happiness.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that, the ability to keep small friends in a long run is more important for happily life than many new friends because of lod friends have more stability and are true ones. If people want to satisfy in their life they shoul maintain their old friends.
- TPO 37 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 69, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...p has played a prevailing role in every individuals life. In this regard, there is a long-s...
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Line 1, column 274, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
...re leading proponents of the claim that few number of persons over a long time is more sig...
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Line 1, column 471, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ead to happiness. In the following essay , I will elaborate on my view point throu...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... point through two noticeable reasons. First of all, long friendships have mor...
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Line 3, column 68, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , in
...hips have more stability. In other words,in the long run, people get familiar with ...
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Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...whether they can count on their help in a emergency situation or not. For example...
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Line 3, column 436, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...onality, but also she is kind. Had I not gone to that university and not got fami...
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Line 5, column 12, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
...ole in every friendships. Secondly, few number of friends but over a long period of ti...
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Line 5, column 50, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
..., few number of friends but over a long period of time are true friends. the indication of a r...
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Line 5, column 83, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...a long period of time are true friends. the indication of a real friends only ident...
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Line 5, column 296, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'nominate'
Suggestion: nominate
...riendship after seven years, they could nominated them on part of family not only a frien...
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Line 7, column 209, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... have more stability and are true ones. If people want to satisfy in their life th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.821875 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66394305841 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54375 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3637356499 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7647058824 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8235294118 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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