TPO 51Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in today's world, the movies and television are far influential among communities. While some people believe that these kinds of media have significant bad impacts among the juveniles, the others hold the view that the television and movies have a variety of benefits for them. Personally, I concur with the former group viewpoint. The reasons substantiating my standpoint are explored in the following pargraphs.
To begin with, the most of TV programms are for entertaining, such as movies, music concerts, or showing the sports competiton; thus, whatching them is a huge waste of time. To elaborate, the policy makers and the managers of channels are the businessmans who are looking for their interests; therefore they are looking for the programms which are appealing among the people. It is crystal clear that, the amusing and entertaining programms are more compeling among the people than scientific programms or documentries. Thus, when the juveniles watch the movies on TV they should watch multitudinous advertisments. Therefore, watching this kind of television shows is a collosel wast of the precious time. Besides, one source of income for the channels is the broadcasting of advertisments.
In addition, there are a lot of fancy advertisments in the televison which entices the youngsters into buying the products which they do not realy want. To elucidate, as I mentioned in the previous paragraph, one source of income for tv channels is the showing of adverts, and needless to say that, the companies for increasing their sale they make some fancy videos to stimulates the juveniles. To take this notion into a vivid picture, there are some competition among the juveniles to have more luxury devices and these kind of advertisement make this circumstance more severe. Therefore, the TV programms train the young people as consumer persons who do not have any good beneficary for their societies.
As shown above, considering all the points and the reasons mentioned, one may conclude that television and movies have more negative impacts than their beneficary. It is because, not only the squander the precious time of young people, but also lure them into buying the stuff which is unnecessary.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 518, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...veniles to have more luxury devices and these kind of advertisement make this circumstance...
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Line 13, column 189, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...eir beneficary. It is because, not only the squander the precious time of young people, but ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, while, in addition, kind of, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1897.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25484764543 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94963776589 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518005540166 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4356025046 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.5625 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5625 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135328895713 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475227595319 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452150913747 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0985238863439 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454623059617 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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