TPO 54
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Governments always confront the dilemma of whether to spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics. While some people are inclined towards the idea that the government should allocate a considerable amount of money in support of art, others, on the other hand, are against this idea. As far as I am concerned, I am of the opinion that the advantages of investing in the art are immense and indisputable in comparison to athletic support. In the following paragraph, I will delve into some reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
The first noteworthy reason coming to my mind is that in this hectic world, people need something like art to relieve their stress and anxiety and get away from hustle and bustle of daily life. Nowadays, people are confronting with great numbers of hardships and troublesome situations that have deprived them of peace and led to lots of stress. Therefore, by investing in the art section and providing more opportunities to have access to art, people can get rid of all of these stresses and tensions. For instance, by staring silently at a piece of artwork in the street and contemplating its meaning, people can find peace and tranquility.
Another exquisite point to be mentioned is that art is one of the best ways to raise people's awareness about thousands of subjects. It is scientifically proven that the effectiveness of some significant massages can increase substantially if the massage is conveyed implicitly. Thus, devoting a great amount of budget to this area is worthwhile. Moreover, art can be used to make other countries familiar with our culture, costumes, and history which will bring countless benefits to our countries. For instance, by supporting a folklore musical band, other countries can know about our myths and history. As a consequence, many tourists from foreign countries tend to visit our country to know more about it.
To summarize, from what has been discussed above, it is crystal clear that allocating more money in support of art benefit our countries in many ways. The first merit is it offers people an opportunity to relax and get away from daily problems. In addition, through art government can broaden people's horizons about various subjects and also use art as a way to introduce our country to foreigners.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in addition, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99224806202 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8487666031 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550387596899 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.986156175 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.647058824 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7647058824 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191264875989 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653811717422 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837036487477 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129081116519 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0984694654222 0.0645574589148 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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