TPO18
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
It comes as no surprise that efforts to finding the most effective people for students by whom they are influenced have been always among the top priorities. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is that whether teachers have more effects on students than their friends or not. I, to a great extent, concur with the idea that friends have greater influence on the students. The rationale behind this thesis will be elaborated by the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point that makes me hold this belief is that young people are greatly receptive of their age mates. It goes without saying that people in the same age have similar concerns and attitudes; so, they can better influence each other. For example, a teacher cannot figure out the problems of students since he lived in different era, when he was in their age, which the condition definitely differ from present. Consider a student that have a problem and talk to his teacher and his friends. His friends can evaluate the problem from the student's viewpoint and give him practical advises. But the teacher look at the problem from his angle which is totally differ from his prospective and so his advises are nonsense for student.
Another reason deserving some words here is that since friends spend a lot of time with each other, they can intentionally or unintentionally affect each other. When people spend time beside each other, they gradually obtain various behaviors from each other until their characteristics become the same. For example, if some people spend many time with each other, you can vividly see this similarity in them. Researches show people's brain unintentionally receive information from the surrounding environment and imprints them in their mind. Whatsoever the more the information are repeated, the more effect they have on people's behavior.
Finally, yet importantly, whatsoever students are comfortable with people, they get influence from them. Since the students are more comfortable with their friends rather than by teachers, friends have more effects on them. Teachers are usually elder than students; so, students must respect them and consider a proper distance between themselves and their teacher. In this circumstance, they do not feel comfort to talk with them and get their opinion about different matters in their life. On the other hands, friends are really comfortable with each other and can easily talk about their concerns and dilemma. As I remember, when I was in high school, I had a critical financial problem. First, I thought to consult with my teacher, but I was embarrassed about the subject and cannot talk to him. But, I talked to one of my friends, he kindly advices me and I could solve my problem by his advice.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned paragraphs, one can soon realize that students are more receptive of their friends since not only do they completely know others' needs and can better influence each other, but also they spend a lot of time with their friends and are more comfortable with them. It is highly recommended that parents not underestimate the value of choosing right friends for their children since they have huge impact on their behavior.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 554, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...iends can evaluate the problem from the students viewpoint and give him practical advise...
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Line 3, column 673, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'differed'.
Suggestion: differed
...problem from his angle which is totally differ from his prospective and so his advises...
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Line 5, column 339, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
...same. For example, if some people spend many time with each other, you can vividly see th...
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Line 9, column 392, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to right'
Suggestion: to right
...not underestimate the value of choosing right friends for their children since they h...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, really, regarding, so, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2728.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 535.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09906542056 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67864880165 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476635514019 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 816.3 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7943227922 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.12 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287992981459 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0934661017111 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675048024089 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183417601165 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667119694386 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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