University class or Museum.
Despite the undeniable fact that the students' time is diamond if the adults' time is golden, and the legitimate concern of parents that they should be educated as much as possible in their hey days, with regard to the today's various forms of educating, we would find that the direct education not only is not promising anymore but asking them to attend classes in their break time such as summer will backfire. Thus, were I supposed to recommend a practical educational summer plan for high school students, I would suggest that they go to different museums rather than attending in class even with the tempting proposal of attending university's classes. This essay will try to articulate the reasons for this preference.
First and foremost, as told earlier, the student consider the summer break in which they can curiously discover adventure, travel, or generally do everything they enjoy as a bonus of their striving and even arduous time they had in school. Therefore, requesting from them to attend classes, even for their good, conveys our arrogant manner to not fully consider their will and wants. We should also notice that today's students are conscious enough to not fool with the suggestion of experiencing the university's atmosphere without any residents and locked doors in the summer! On the other hand, by giving them the freedom of choice to select every museum they wish, patronized summer educational plan would find another meaning for them. Through it, they can satisfy their teenagehood greed of seeking and discovering, further to gaining durable knowledge, because as education experts argue the most enduring knowledge is the thing people practically acquire by observation and experiences rather than abstract education .
Additionally, it could be a helpful method to examine their interests and talents. Imagin if the demanded plan due to preceding reasons gave them the option of choosing among the different museum, and since there access in the wide range of selections, from animals' life museum to peace and war museums, it would give us a measure to evaluate their internal desire for a special topic. A student, for instance, visiting an animal museum and afterwards writing an exhaustive and thorough report based on an exact research would be also attracted to the biological courses or related careers; another student with the same visited museum, conversely, who did not present the same job could lead us to the result that he or she could not possibly stir up by biology.
In conclusion, considering the meaning of summer holiday for student and the benefits we wish to provide for them through education, the most promising proposal would be inviting them to incorporate with their teaching materials, which could visibly happen through visiting a museum. Moreover, they would experience enjoyable moments in this period of recreation, namely summer.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...find that the direct education not only is not promising anymore but asking them to attend class...
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Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...ime such as summer will backfire. Thus, were I supposed to recommend a practical edu...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd another meaning for them. Through it, they can satisfy their teenagehood greed...
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Suggestion: .
...periences rather than abstract education . Additionally, it could be a helpful m...
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... access in the wide range of selections, from animals life museum to peace and wa...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'conversely', 'first', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'as to', 'for instance', 'i suppose', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'with regard to', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.217221135029 0.229887763892 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.146771037182 0.158761421928 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0841487279843 0.0866891130778 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0684931506849 0.046263068375 148% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0724070450098 0.0685040099705 106% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12133072407 0.118717715034 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0450097847358 0.0351676179071 128% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.65983932473 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0352250489237 0.0309702414327 114% => OK
Particles: 0.00195694716243 0.00188951952338 104% => OK
Determiners: 0.0900195694716 0.0887237588012 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0352250489237 0.0209618222197 168% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00587084148728 0.0139019557991 42% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2900.0 2387.08602151 121% => OK
No of words: 468.0 408.028673835 115% => OK
Chars per words: 6.19658119658 5.86048508987 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.412393162393 0.338922669872 122% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.32264957265 0.251872472559 128% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.205128205128 0.174417080927 118% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.130341880342 0.112833075102 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65983932473 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566239316239 0.524397521467 108% => OK
Word variations: 69.4982361077 59.2087087015 117% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6684587814 63% => OK
Sentence length: 36.0 20.5533526081 175% => OK
Sentence length SD: 105.437942712 48.84282405 216% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 223.076923077 120.699889404 185% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 36.0 20.5533526081 175% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.23076923077 0.644075263715 191% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 68.264957265 45.7405998639 149% => OK
Elegance: 1.33333333333 1.45489161554 92% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0639082596271 0.300154397459 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0961904283316 0.103427244359 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0497289417775 0.0752933317313 66% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.570398402406 0.497263757937 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.171852640084 0.151897553556 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0269492294025 0.114077575197 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035294328092 0.0781384742642 45% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.437175827923 0.336927656856 130% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0780109670874 0.067059652881 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0462858282939 0.210909579961 22% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035443078234 0.0618886996521 57% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.