University has 2 programs for students in break time between 2 semesters. Which one do you prefer?
1) Taking some courses or classes which have no connection with your major,
2) Take work project (working in city, or in school to teach children to overcome/do their homework.
At the turn of the new century, with the development of human's modern society and galloping rate of science and technology, there is no doubt that educational system has a pivotal role in the students' success and blooming and thriving the society. Actually, people's attitudes toward its strategies are widely varied from person to person. Although some people adhere to this belief that students need to take additional courses between two semesters, in my vantage point, taking a working project can be highly beneficial since students can socialize with experienced people, and also they can easily find a decent job in future.
The first aspect to point out is that what provokes students to take working project in their break time is interacting with knowledgeable persons in their field. As a matter of fact, in today's world, jobs are being specialized and complicated so much so that everyone in charge of a particular job should enjoy a great amount of experience in that field. That is why many students prefer to take a work project in order to strengthen their knowledge and skills. To illustrate more, take a case of an ingenious student who suffers from lack of practical information in his major for instance. If he takes a work project, not only can he get familiar with skillful people, but also he can benefit from their precious experiences. Hence, they can socialize with different people who have different viewpoints in their field.
The second subtle point is that finding a decent occupation in future can be considered another remarkable advantage of taking a work project in their leisure time. It is absolutely undeniable, in the competitive world of today, one of the rigors of modern life is finding an appropriate job with high salary. Students can improve their resume by having work experience, so they can grasp opportunities which are provided after their graduation. According to recent researches conducted in my country, individuals who have working experiences in their school have enough self-confidence to persuade employers to get job. In my own experience, although I graduated from one of the most prestigious universities in my country, I cannot seize jobs’ opportunities. Had I had worked in my high school, I could have revolutionized my life by being employed in a reputable company and I could have accumulated a horde of money and have experienced independent life.
On the whole, according to the above-mentioned points and details, it is crystal-clear that taking a work project in studying period can leave profound effects on a person’s life because he can get familiar with specialist individuals and also can find a decent job in future. It is high time, we overlooking the fact that we can have promising future just by expanding our knowledge in varied fields. How can a student interact with specialist individuals? How can a graduate person find a promising career? Undoubtedly, answer of these questions is acquiring work’s experiences in high school. (494 words)
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...tional system has a pivotal role in the students success and blooming and thriving the s...
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Line 1, column 620, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... also they can easily find a decent job in future. The first aspect to point out is that...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ividuals and also can find a decent job in future. It is high time, we overlooking the fa...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'look', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'for instance', 'no doubt', 'as a matter of fact', 'on the whole']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246823956443 0.229887763892 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.152450090744 0.158761421928 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0998185117967 0.0866891130778 115% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0308529945554 0.046263068375 67% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0635208711434 0.0685040099705 93% => OK
Prepositions: 0.137931034483 0.118717715034 116% => OK
Participles: 0.0580762250454 0.0351676179071 165% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.01890868873 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Infinitives: 0.021778584392 0.0309702414327 70% => OK
Particles: 0.00181488203267 0.00188951952338 96% => OK
Determiners: 0.0744101633394 0.0887237588012 84% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0344827586207 0.0209618222197 165% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0145190562613 0.0139019557991 104% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3039.0 2387.08602151 127% => OK
No of words: 496.0 408.028673835 122% => OK
Chars per words: 6.12701612903 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.399193548387 0.338922669872 118% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.29435483871 0.251872472559 117% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.213709677419 0.174417080927 123% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.155241935484 0.112833075102 138% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01890868873 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522177419355 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 62.3387754489 59.2087087015 105% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.619047619 20.5533526081 115% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.8396933444 48.84282405 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.714285714 120.699889404 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.619047619 20.5533526081 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.644075263715 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 53.05453149 45.7405998639 116% => OK
Elegance: 1.79411764706 1.45489161554 123% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300599741059 0.300154397459 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0877746894606 0.103427244359 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0704434094039 0.0752933317313 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.441783785998 0.497263757937 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.147696224469 0.151897553556 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107319584872 0.114077575197 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752991415745 0.0781384742642 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.400342762419 0.336927656856 119% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0411380637457 0.067059652881 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209036757458 0.210909579961 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505182782688 0.0618886996521 82% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.