The university will spend money on dormitory to improve the life quality of students, which of the following do you think is the best way?
1)providing a room for quiet study
2)building an exercise room
3)providing entertainment place(watch film)
Education, the foundation of future success, has been valued and even triggers a heated discussion over what is the best way to improve the quality of dormitory life. In order to better accommodate themselves to school life, students, in some people’s views, should build a place for entertainment or exercises. contrary to these people’s opinions is my perspective that constructing a quiet place for study will benefit students due to the contributions to their professional and personal life.
what must be prioritized is that a quite place for study, instead of an exercise room, will place students as beneficiaries in their professional life , by enabling them to acquire more time to study and the ability to learn by themselves. To begin with, students only have limited time to study during day time for the reason that library and classrooms close on time everyday. As a result, students will end up with nowhere to study, building a quite place , having silent atmosphere, can provide students with more time to learn knowledge; on the contrary, such abundant time, beneficial for students’ academic life, cannot be obtained in a noisy exercise room. what’s more, students who study in a quite place , far away from teachers, can strengthen their self-learning ability. To be more specific, students, reading and learning by themselves in the dormitory, have to look up for the information, tackle the problems , review the class notes all by themselves, which can boost their efficiency; however, such opportunities to learn on their own, which does good to their professional future, will not be encountered in a gym.
what should be equally discussing is that building a quiet room, rather than an entertainment room, can benefit students more in their personal life, by offering them a peaceful living area and a platform to communicate more. Initially, dormitory, where kids live in, plays a significant role in ensuring students’ sleeping quality. specifically, it is the quiet environment that guarantees students’ sleeping well and enables them to study energetically; in contrast, such a quiet dormitory will not exist if the school plans to build an entertainment room, which is noisy and disruptive. Moreover, with a study building built, students will have more opportunities to gather together, talking about academic and mental problems, exchanging their thoughts and ideas with each other and sharing their experience in studying, which promotes the students to develop these skills; however, such tactics vital in personal life will not be mentioned in an entertainment room.
professional life, the basis of school life,will be improved with a study place; personal life, the another vital element in school life, will be bettered with a study room built. To conclude, only by building a quiet study place can students reap the maximum benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, moreover, so, then, well, in contrast, talking about, as a result, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2437.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32096069869 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98638003834 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484716157205 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 743.4 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.8020978765 48.9658058833 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.071428571 100.406767564 173% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.7142857143 20.6045352989 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351195271431 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140624974917 0.076458572812 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654466836132 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235584861301 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252710584766 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 11.7677419355 170% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.17 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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