Living in modern environment invented new circumstances for individual to hold multiple tasks against the competitive condition in order to, develop and improve their skills. Some people argues that bearing one task against different activities make people happy. However, others have contradicted views. As far as I am concern engaging with various amount of tasks made worker more satisfied. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, people have vast variety of ability which can be explore through passing the challenging careers. In fact, when people get involve with just one activity, they will get on bored and lose their confidence in terms of their abilities. Moreover, their mind become less creative. On the other hand, once who work in different positions and gain useful skills could face challenging job opportunities. Therefor, great creativity would be obtained through these challenges. One of my own experiences is a good case in point. I had been working with different professional company for ten years, which opened me a significant amounts of opportunities. In this regard my talented had been flourished over the course of that time. These circumstances not only helped experience such excited days but also gave me a time to make my mind more creative, which have made me convinced. In other words, Pleasure in the job puts perfection in the work
Second, considering the fact that people are living in a competitive and complex days of modern life, the diligence of working in great amount of position to improve their communities and themselves seems a curtail fact. In this regard, people have to gain different skills. Although, they may get frustrated by this hectic daily lifestyle, they would have open the skillful circumstances, which makes lots of job opportunities for them. One recent study presented the extent of happier people which were involve with multiple tasks, and others who had just one job in whole day. What is impressed me is that, people not only would develop their skills by doing different tasks but develop their countries.
In conclusion, I strongly agree with the statement that people would be happier by operating more than one activities. It is not only gaves them feel more talented but makes them more useful for their communities and their family.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 306, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...owever, others have contradicted views. As far as I am concern engaging with vario...
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Line 2, column 633, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'amount'?
Suggestion: amount
...en years, which opened me a significant amounts of opportunities. In this regard my tal...
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Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... their communities and themselves seems a curtail fact. In this regard, people have to ga...
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Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'involved'.
Suggestion: involved
...the extent of happier people which were involve with multiple tasks, and others who had...
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Line 4, column 104, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one activity', 'an activity', or simply 'activities'?
Suggestion: one activity; an activity; activities
...would be happier by operating more than one activities. It is not only gaves them feel more ta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11627906977 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74001005878 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537467700258 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4858882477 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2857142857 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52380952381 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152904981467 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440744350634 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0328819776627 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0984081203446 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021461853064 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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