In my view, it is better to have a large proportion of adults among all the people in any society. This larger share has the ability contribute significantly. In other words, it is intuitive that young adults are more capable, can work harder than most old-aged people and as a result contribute much more than them to the economy. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will elaborate on in the following paragraphs.
First of all, any society with more number of will progress more. Each society is comprised of many divisions like work force, educational force, etc., Since more adults are more involved in any society, it is better to have more people of the society involved in its advancement. Moreover, young adults has the ability to contribute a lot to the region they live in when compared to the old people. Although many old people have had contributed a lot in their prime, but it is intuitive that young adult could drive the society forward. In reality, youth has been involving very much nowadays i e., taking part in the working economy since the dawn of computer technology. A recent study says that the number of adults is 20% more than the number of old people in any industry. Substantially, the youth of current generation has been responsible for the increase in the economy. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Right since 2010, youth has been interested in startups and a large number of companies have changed the course of economy in the United States.
Secondly, new research studies and inventions are essential in order to make our lives better and more young adults have been committed to such field lately. For instance, due to the rise of internet, people around the world are incentivised with more exposure of knowledge than ever before. Consequently, people have become more interested and involved in various fields causing them to work very much in research. This, in turn, leads to new inventions, which make our lives easier, and are also crucial for the culmination of the economy. Although, the number of students enrolled in universities has been increasing every year, these students might work hard to increase our well being. However, it might seem that young adults have been attracted to computer technology rather than the traditional sciences, but in reality, the numbers are increasing in almost every field. Even in the most oldest field, i.e., literature, numbers are increasing evidently.
In conclusion, although it is true that people of any age can take their part for the betterment of the society, still it is important to mention that having more young adults than old people is even better. Nonetheless, these young adults might some day become older and they are replaced by youth of succeeding generation, and it is a never ending perpetual loop
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 80, Rule ID: IS_COMPRISED_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of' or 'is composed of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of; is composed of
...ber of will progress more. Each society is comprised of many divisions like work force, educati...
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Line 3, column 561, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... society forward. In reality, youth has been involving very much nowadays i e., taking part in...
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Line 3, column 997, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...uth has been interested in startups and a large number of companies have changed the course of ec...
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Line 5, column 892, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'oldest' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: oldest
...sing in almost every field. Even in the most oldest field, i.e., literature, numbers are in...
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Line 5, column 892, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'most the oldest'.
Suggestion: most the oldest
...sing in almost every field. Even in the most oldest field, i.e., literature, numbers are in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my view, in other words, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2361.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92901878914 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64755863572 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46764091858 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.0 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5553224727 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.318181818 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7727272727 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.31818181818 5.45110844103 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197199054069 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608969589465 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576823235447 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145203452743 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524804502053 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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