Young people enjoy life more than older people do.
People have different views about which group enjoys more their lives, the young or old people? While some ague that the old people are more likely to enjoy their lives for some reasons such as more wisdom, I believe that the young people enjoy more because they are healthier, they have less responsibilities, and they have not tolerated loss of their dear ones.
One of the primary causes is that, roughly speaking, young people are healthier than older people. Usually older people afflict several kinds of illnesses, and all of their organs are suffering a multitude of pains. For example, my grand mother in her last years of life, had two eye surgeries, and at last, afflicted dementia which was a very annoying malady. She got lost a couple of times, in fact. furthermore, because young people are healthier, they can be more active. For instance they can exercise regularly, or they can participate in parties and dance. Movement is difficult for a typical old person, so they are usually reluctant to participate in such programs. For these reasons, being more salubrious, young people have more merriment in their lives.
Another aspect to consider is that elderly people have more responsibilities in their lives. One field that older people carry responsiblity in it is their family. Usually an old person serves either as a mother or a father for several children. They should think and plan about the youngster's future, and if their offsprings are not independent yet, they should fulfill their current requirements e.g. the costs of university, housing, renting a car, and so on. Another realm that the older people carry its onerous duty is work. Commonly, any parent possess a vocation, and he/she should be accountable with respect to his/her boss, or clients. All of these considerations get an old person to tolerate more stresses. A typical old person is always worried about his work, and the consternation precludes merriment. Thus, the older people enjoy less of their lives in that not only are they responsible with regard to their families, but also they feel duty in a professional circumference.
What is more, older people usually have lost some of their dears. Inevitably, as someone lives more, he would be more likely to lose his relatives like parents. For any person this is a unique lament to lose his/her parents. The main reason is that all of us are accustomed to our parents, and have been with them from the very beginning. If someone gets old, he will experience losses of a lot of his dear ones, and gradually, he becomes more and more depressed. For this reason, an old one does not ordinarily enjoy his life.
In conclusion, although some may argue that the elderly people are more delighted in their lives, I, personally, postulate that the young people are more ebullient since they enjoy a healthier life, less duties, and less lack of loved people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, e.g., furthermore, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, what is more, with regard to, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2412.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92244897959 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63015543603 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489795918367 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 762.3 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 13.0 1.86738351254 696% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2775808692 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7692307692 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8461538462 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.19230769231 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383048532644 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12216715181 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117926657619 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262865306988 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724189550167 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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