Young people enjoy life more than older people do. Do you agree or disagree?
People enjoy something different level at different age and this change according to person's characterize. Some people think people who is old enjoy life less than younger people. I attend that people who think this way. In my writing I will explain two important reasons why I feel this way.
Firstly, younger people have not most experience about life and they are exciting to do something like attending new environment and doing different activities that have never done before. I have a experience about this situation. When I was 16 my father and I decided to go to football match. Before the match day I didn't sit anywhere because I was very exiciting about my first stadium experience. However, my father looked like as do not go to match. When I said him this situation he said that he don't know how much time go to football match. I see now something isn't exciting in time and young people have more things to do than older so young people enjoy more than older people.
Secondly, people's most energetic time is youth. I think energy is necessary to enjoy life and to do something with wanting. If you doesn't have enough energy to do something that you want to do you don't do it so you don't enjoy it. For example, I climbing mountain and this sport is needed great effort. My uncle concerned about this sport. I offered him to climb with me. We went to climb but he didn't continue with me. At the beginning that activity he was very tired. That's why younger people enjoy life more than older people.
In conclusion, Age isn't determined factor but with age people change like increasing experience and decreasing energy. In my opinion, people asses their young time beacuse They may never find this taste.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1422.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 304.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67763157895 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4120972817 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493421052632 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 446.4 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3419534519 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.6363636364 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8181818182 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68181818182 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417392302254 0.236089414692 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112720755742 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141163219402 0.0737576698707 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248064787316 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0892412401054 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 11.7677419355 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.27 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.72 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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