In my opinion, age is not a factor which can influence whether a person will be able to enjoy their life. Enjoyment is more of a cerebral process and it can be achieved by doing whatever you feel you want to do without being worried of the other things. I do not agree with the prompt that young people enjoy more than the older people for following three reasons.
First of all, young people are more stressed than the older ones with the pressure of sculpting their career and to reach financial stability. In addition to this, they also have to think about piling up savings, to support their family, paying the bills. They hardly can allot time for other activities, which they can enjoy, from their busy schedules. For example, an average person has to devote almost 8+ hours to work each day. Work eats up almost half of the time a person has when they are awake. This leads to paucity of time devoted to other activities and therefore cannot enjoy their life. On the other hand, old people are free from this daily struggle and have tons of free time to do whatever activities they want to do (if their body permits).
Another reason is that the older people, since being retired from work, have more people with whom they can engage in activities. Humans are social creatures and need an audience or a group with whom they can enjoy life. Young people are engaged in a rushed life and the lives of most of the people in the group are not in sync with each other. This makes it hard for them to remove time from their schedule to meet each other and do something together. Old people, since having a lot of free time, can do activities together with their friends and family and can have more fun in their lives.
It is true that young people have more energy and are likely to be more healthy and active than older people but they are not the essentials needed for enjoying one's life. Free time and company are important factors and old people are usually rich in those departments and are more likely to enjoy their lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 162, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... not the essentials needed for enjoying ones life. Free time and company are importa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, as to, for example, in addition, first of all, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1667.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4811827957 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.07003036826 2.67179642975 77% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467741935484 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.184618081 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.0588235294 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8823529412 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52941176471 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.390751401441 0.236089414692 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145406588423 0.076458572812 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144230344031 0.0737576698707 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.307977346693 0.150856017488 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119856159975 0.0645574589148 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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