Young people enjoy more life than older ones do.
enjoying in life is a very important matter for human being. our mental and our physical manner is completely depends on the quality of our living. people have different way for pleasure. Some individuals believe that life is more enjoy">enjoyable for juveniles in comparison to older people. Personally, I confirm this statement and I should claim that new generations have more approaches to feel delightful. I will substantiate my opinion in the following paragraphs.
The first thing coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that young people are more energetic and more adventurous and in addition, they use their leisure time more efficient. In order to shed light on this matter I bring an example. Going on a trip or a picnic to strange regions of the country is a very common activity among students. these trips are very attractive because they do a lot of breathtaking pursuits such as free jumping or swimming in natural lakes. As you can see, juveniles enjoy their life because they are adrenaline junky.
The second reason behind my opinion is rooted in the fact that new generations utilize the-state-of-art technological devices and this activity is very pleasant for them. In contrast, elder people don't have a great tendency to theses equipment such as smartphones or video games. they believe that these devices are necessary for their services not their recreational aspect. For example, older people think that smartphones are for being in touch with others. However, young people pay attention to the recreational facet of the technology such as playing video games by their smartphones through the internet with strangers or their friends. thus, juveniles spend more time for enjoying with themselves and with their friends.
In brief, I should claim that joy is a momentous part of life for new generations rather than older people because not only young people are more energetic and more adventurous but also they have more attention to the recreational aspect of modern technology not just their main service. thus, it's better to motivate elder people to make their life more enjoy">enjoyable.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, thus, for example, in addition, in brief, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1820.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02484406749 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514285714286 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0060797844 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7894736842 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4210526316 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52631578947 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321292682399 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0922983270563 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953120741121 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220329412318 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0999793578868 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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