young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities
In my view, nowadays young people do not give enough time to helping their communities. In this modern world, it would become a culture because the nature of this world caused this. there is three main reasons that I think lead the society to this manner.
Firstly, I think the society going to the way that not use the young people and won't allow them to help the community as well as before and it's because of the improving public health of the whole world that raise the age of presenting the elder people in society and also raise the retirement age. The elder one wants to handle everything in their own way and don't use the new way of that present by the new generation and it becomes a preventing cause of entering young people to help to the community.
Secondly, nowadays communication system such as internet-based communication apps lead the young people to have less communication in person and it causes that they make a unique world for themselves and it may cause that they couldn't connect to real world and its problems and also they can't relate themselves to the issues of the real world so they have not any solution for the problems may accure in societies.
And finally, they have less time than before to help. This world becoming much more bigger than before and the jobs need more quality than before so young people should spend a lot of time improving themselves to qualify for a job and become successful.
So, I agree with the main idea that nowadays young people spend less time on helping the community and its happened because of the nature of modern world.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
... the nature of these world caused this. there is three main resons that i think lead ...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 215, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...d this. there is three main resons that i think lead the society to this manner. ...
^
Line 2, column 206, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng puplic health of the whole world that rise the age of presnting the elder peop...
^^
Line 2, column 265, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...resnting the elder people in society and also rise the retirement age. The elder ...
^^
Line 2, column 359, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...handel every thing in their own way and dont use the new way of that present by new ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 421, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...f that present by new generation and it become a preventing couse of entering young pe...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 62, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mmuniction system such as internet based communication apps lead the young people...
^^
Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...n in person and it couse that they make a unic world for themselves and it may co...
^
Line 3, column 286, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...al world and its problems and also they cant relate themslves to the issues of the r...
^^^^
Line 4, column 79, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'bigger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: bigger
...efore to help. This world becoming much more bigger than before and the jobs need more qual...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, i think, such as, as well as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 15.1003584229 7% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1292.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 285.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53333333333 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25811760238 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484210526316 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 405.9 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 111.462998345 48.9658058833 228% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 143.555555556 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6666666667 20.6045352989 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 5.45110844103 220% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 58.1214874552 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.59 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
... the nature of these world caused this. there is three main resons that i think lead ...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 215, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...d this. there is three main resons that i think lead the society to this manner. ...
^
Line 2, column 206, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng puplic health of the whole world that rise the age of presnting the elder peop...
^^
Line 2, column 265, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...resnting the elder people in society and also rise the retirement age. The elder ...
^^
Line 2, column 359, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...handel every thing in their own way and dont use the new way of that present by new ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 421, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...f that present by new generation and it become a preventing couse of entering young pe...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 62, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mmuniction system such as internet based communication apps lead the young people...
^^
Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...n in person and it couse that they make a unic world for themselves and it may co...
^
Line 3, column 286, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...al world and its problems and also they cant relate themslves to the issues of the r...
^^^^
Line 4, column 79, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'bigger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: bigger
...efore to help. This world becoming much more bigger than before and the jobs need more qual...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, i think, such as, as well as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 15.1003584229 7% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1292.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 285.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53333333333 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25811760238 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484210526316 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 405.9 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 111.462998345 48.9658058833 228% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 143.555555556 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6666666667 20.6045352989 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 5.45110844103 220% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 58.1214874552 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.59 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.