Lives have changed over the past few years and people are trying to work as soon as possible in order to make a living. Students have to choose between studying pretty fast and work quickly or studying for a long time but with better opportunities. I think studying for a long time is a better choice. I feel this way for three reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Life changes very fast and people need to be ready for it. In the past, people do not think that education is an important thing to do, so they believe that working with hands or doing jobs is very important. For instance, my father had a diploma in electricity and he raised eight children. He had to finish as soon as possible in order to raise his children. However, now it is difficult to do that. This is because the salary for a diploma degree could not make a living for a family. My brother is a good compelling example. He graduated from La Mesa College as a barber and then open a Salon. He thought a full-time job would provide for him a very generous life. Unfortunately, he had an accident that affected his hand and he could not work anymore as a barber because that is his only major. On the other hand, if he had studied a different major such as pharmacy, he would have a better life even after the injury.
In addition, studying for many years open a lot of opportunities. For instance, studying pharmacy open for students a lot of offers such as hospitals, companies, government, and universities. If you do not have luck with an area, you can change your career. For instance, my uncle graduated as a pharmacist. For the first 10 years after graduation, he worked as a hospital pharmacist. Then, he changed his career to a medical representative. Now, he has his own pharmacy. As you can see, yes he studied a lot, but he could change his career as life change.
Frankly speaking, it is a difficult choice for young people because young people want money as soon as possible in order to fulfill their short dreams such as buying a good car and living independently. However, if they chose money, they will regret themselves in the next few years. That is why you see a lot of people complete their education after some years of working. So, I think students have to read old stories to learn from them and study for the long term.
In conclusion, I think my friend should choose to study for many years. This because life changes with time, and it will open a lot of opportunities for him.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, frankly, however, if, so, then, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2050.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48577680525 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60320310297 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466083150985 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.6860576406 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.6896551724 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7586206897 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44827586207 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162903409827 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489989729614 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487855926213 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10389572502 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0277756516607 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.63 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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