The reading passage and listenning passage both discuss about altruism. The reading states that altruism is a behavior of a creature that gains nothing and give a lot of benefit and sacrifice for other creature with the result of behavior. The passage gives some reasons to support the idea. However, the lecturer casts doubt on reading passage and refutes each of the reasons.
First of all, the author claims that the sentinel meerkat which lives as a group in Africa is a good example of altruism behavior. Although, the lecturer refutes the idea that the sentinel meerkat doesn't gain anything while it is guarding the group. In other words, she states that the guard meerkat have better chance to escape from predator than other members of group.
Secondly, the reading explains that humans can act alturism by donation of their body organs to relatives or strangers without having any benefit. Despite that professor opposes the reason by saying that the donator who donates their kidney to a relative or stranger have appreciation from society. Therefore, they can have some benefits. Moreover, donators also have self-worth which is very important and valuable for some of them.Consequently, she claims that donators have benefits and it doesn't mean a kind of alturuism behavior.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 241, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...r creature with the result of behavior. The passage gives some reasons to support t...
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Line 3, column 132, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...is a good example of altruism behavior. Although, the lecturer refutes the idea that the...
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Line 3, column 198, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...utes the idea that the sentinel meerkat doesnt gain anything while it is guarding the ...
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Line 5, column 434, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Consequently
...important and valuable for some of them.Consequently, she claims that donators have benefits...
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Line 5, column 494, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...aims that donators have benefits and it doesnt mean a kind of alturuism behavior.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, kind of, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1083.0 1373.03311258 79% => OK
No of words: 210.0 270.72406181 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15714285714 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57277301714 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 145.348785872 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580952380952 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 332.1 419.366225166 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0315526232 49.2860985944 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4545454545 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0909090909 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5454545455 7.06452816374 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160492152441 0.272083759551 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596432070425 0.0996497079465 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754389650113 0.0662205650399 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107058568185 0.162205337803 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487757837365 0.0443174109184 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.3589403974 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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