integrated 46
Both the reading and the lecture try to discuss paper form and electronic form of medical information about patient in United States. In the reading section, the writer contends that storing medical information in electronic form can highly beneficial and provides three reasons for support; in contrast, the professor casts doubts on reading points by indicating that the advantages of electronic form are uncertain.
First of all, in the reading, the writer claims that electronic records are cost effective compared to the paper records because in this way, they can decline costs by eliminating required storage space which are used to maintain paper forms, and also doctors can readily access to electronic forms from everywhere they want; However, the professor rejects this notion by stating that doctors need storage space even after adopting to electronic forms because they need to keep paper forms as a backup and maybe they refer to them in future.
Moreover, the reading passage holds the view that electronic records can prevent potential errors because they have standard forms; on the contrary, the lecturer underlines the fact that electronic records cannot eliminate errors because in this process, also doctors use pen, paper and take not by hand and staffs should later enter these information in computer and save them as electronic forms, so it is likely that they make mistakes and cannot interpret doctors' notes correctly.
In addition, the writer mentions that electronic records can be used in research projects; conversely, the professor states there are some restricted privacy laws in United States for using medical information, as a result researchers have to follow these restricted laws. Moreover, their permit to use medical information for any purpose will be blocked.
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- integrated writing 83
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 532, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...s a backup and maybe they refer to them in future. Moreover, the reading passage holds t...
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Line 4, column 335, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...t by hand and staffs should later enter these information in computer and save them as electronic...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'conversely', 'first', 'however', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.275641025641 0.261695866417 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.157051282051 0.158904122519 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0769230769231 0.0723426182421 106% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0544871794872 0.0435111971325 125% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0320512820513 0.0277247811725 116% => OK
Prepositions: 0.13141025641 0.128828473217 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0448717948718 0.0370669169778 121% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.57689470722 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0288461538462 0.0208969081088 138% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0897435897436 0.128158765124 70% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0288461538462 0.0158828679856 182% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00641025641026 0.0114777025283 56% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1810.0 1645.83664459 110% => OK
No of words: 284.0 271.125827815 105% => OK
Chars per words: 6.37323943662 6.08160592843 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.04852973271 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.433098591549 0.374372842146 116% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.338028169014 0.287516216867 118% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.204225352113 0.187439937562 109% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.140845070423 0.113142543107 124% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57689470722 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 145.348785872 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531690140845 0.539623497131 99% => OK
Word variations: 53.2909689371 53.8517498576 99% => OK
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0529801325 46% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 47.3333333333 21.7502111507 218% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 166.134149276 49.3711431718 337% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 301.666666667 132.220823453 228% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 47.3333333333 21.7502111507 218% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.0 0.878197800319 228% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.39072847682 59% => OK
Readability: 81.1361502347 50.5018328374 161% => OK
Elegance: 1.85526315789 1.90840788429 97% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.549887131256 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.267148784692 0.142949733639 187% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.113208831047 0.0787303798458 144% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.828579535201 0.631733273073 131% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.190222326677 0.139662658121 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.266732575781 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.103435571967 0% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.3073274499 0.414875509568 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0848536187192 0.0530846634433 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.40443939384 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0528353158467 0% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.26048565121 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.62251655629 83% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.1766004415 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 6.0 10.2958057395 58% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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