Integrated Essay writing
Rembrandt Painting
The professor in the lecture is totally agree with the passage that there are some problems with Rembrandt painting ," Woman in white Bonnet". However she explains why these problems occurred in the painting. She provides all the convenient information which proves that the "Woman in white Bonnet is the original one but someone modified for the profit purpose.
Firstly, The professor said that, the woman in the painting wore the fur collar is true.However this modification is done by after 100 years when the painting was created. This modification is done by another painter , to increase the value of the painting. So it is suggested that the originally the painting was made by Rembrandt and then it was modified by someone.
Secondly, The professor said that , Rembrandt have the good knowledge of the light reflection and color . The fur color modification done in the painting ,because of that the illumination by light is replaced by the absorption of the light. This hide the originality of the painting.
Lastly,the professor said that the ,original painting was made up of one whole wood panel by Rembrandt. However to increase the value and the size of the painting it was altered by someone. They include some other pieces of wood glued together .
Finally, all these modifications hide the Rembrandt's original characteristics of the painting.
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24 in 30 Grammar is your big
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Grammar is your big issues.
The professor in the lecture is totally agree with the passage
The professor in the lecture totally agrees with the passage
the woman in the painting wore the fur collar is true
the woman in the painting who wore the fur collar is true
So it is suggested that the originally the painting was made by Rembrandt and then it was modified by someone.
So it is suggested that the original painting was made by Rembrandt and then it was modified by someone.
Rembrandt have the good knowledge of the light reflection and color
Rembrandt had the good knowledge of the light reflection and color
The fur color modification done in the painting
The fur color modification is done in the painting
Sentence: This hide the originality of the painting.
Description: The fragment This hide the is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace hide with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
and the size of the painting it was altered by someone.
and the size of the painting was altered by someone.
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.929 21.0
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 16 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 12
No. of Words: 223 250
No. of Characters: 1105 1200
No. of Different Words: 102 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.864 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.955 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.702 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.929 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.995 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.405 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.639 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4